don't forget me

read it

don't leave me on the side walk

like your old toys

 

don't leave me at  dinner

like you did those other boys

 

don't forget me like a song

in the back of you head

 

don't forget me like that doll

under your bed

 

don't leave me like you left your kids

after what you did

 

pleas don't for get about me

Reviews

[Butterfly Ninja :3]

thats very touching, i can feel the emotions running through your mind at that time, really well penned :)

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I really feel the hurt behind the words you have wrung the heart of thes reader so sad a write by one so young

[I Am Svetlana]

Good concepts and imagery. None of us want to be forgotten by a certain someone who we care about...but sometimes, there is no connection that other person feels. But anyways, to be forgotten is to be lost...in my mind, thats what I think. Great write though.

[Kat]

Awesome poem! i really like how it all connects together Great writing!:)

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

The pleading tone is touching. You picked creative comparisons, especially to the song stuck in your head.

[tigerclaw]

This is so deeply rooted in pain...I can feel the sense of hoping but knowing the truth lives...effective writing.

[Matthew Kult]

Great write.

Matthew

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Amazing! Love the words that you just weaved together. Awesome job!

[Raymond]

15 huh? pretty damn good or at least better than the poems I write. I usually pick out my favorite line...in this case it was everyone of them

[Strike the Wolf]

Shakespere, and others eat your heart ou cause raindrop just served it to you on a silver platter I can feel the anguish behind the words