Goldie the Goldfish

An emotional poem for my pet Goldie the Goldfish.

You are the charm of my little bowl,

Your skin and scale so orange

Like a pleasing sunset. I extol

your charm that no one can challenge.

I am happy as a clam,

whenever I struck with your glance,

Even during my toughest exam,

Seeing you means my luck is enhanced.

I love how you eat

Like a bird feeds on seeds.

How can I forget your sweet

water bubbles which everybody heeds.

O, Goldie! You are the precious part of my kin,

"Don't ever leave me", came a voice from within.

Author's Note

You would fall in love with her on the very first sight!

Reviews

[Undying Glory]

Very cute poem, and just from your description in this one I can just imagine how much joy Goldie must bring you.
"You are the charm of my little bowl,
Your skin and scale so orange
Like a pleasing sunset. I extol
your charm that no one can challenge."
That first stanza starts this one off great here, and I loved this poem. Good job!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot!

[Anjali]

Wow! Such a sweet and cute poetry it is. I loved this. I have a pet too and I know how much love we have for them. Good work!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Anjali]

You're welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice poetry and thoughts for Goldie. I liked the softness of the words and care of something shared. Thank you Raj for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Raj.

[Jackie]

Very cute and lovely written peice about your gold fish

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[barleygirl]

There’s no need for your author’s note becuz we’ve all just fallen in love with your fish, as we read your joyful & affection-filled poem. I am crazy about the frogs & lizards that are plentiful outside around my home, & I’ve written poems of them, but never gloated in glee, as described by you here. I have never been a fan of fish, except I hate how people who fish think they are kind by stabbing a fish with a barbed hook, then tearing out hook & throwing fish back – they think this is a humane practice. Anyhow, your poem is at the other end of this spectrum & I’ve never felt such a rush of love for any creature. Your rhyming, rhythm, & emjambment (wrapping your lines from one to the next) is spot-on. In a few places, you use verbs in a turned-around way compared to what I’m used to seeing. Examples if you’re curious:
“your sight”  “seeing you”
(what the fish sees –vs-- seeing the fish is what makes us happy)
“my luck to enhance”  “my luck is enhanced”
(luck isn’t doing the enhancing, the fish is enhancing your luck)
my suggestion for that line:
“seeing you means my luck is enhanced”
(it’s OK to not have perfect rhymes –
better not to sound like you’re reaching for the rhyme)

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you for your descriptive review dear. I appreciate your suggestion.

[Laurierose]

This was a very sweet read about a little friend so precious. Great read.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear.

[Mikku]

Never got attached to any pet so I don't know how it is...nevertheless... Poem was amazing

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Relic]

I would agree with emipoemi, there are a few awkward bits but it's nice to see someone write about something different.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thanks so much for entering the ode to my pet contest. love the artwork did you paint? Lovely poem

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much!

[Ms Paragon]

Cute!You conveyed sweet emotions and postive associations for your fish.Nicely written!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much!

[Davidgeo]

This is adorable. Seriously, absolutely adorable.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.