Bleak Silence

BLEAK SILENCE

It’s the silence I fear

and hate.

Quiet’s spawn

that opens old wounds,

makes them bleed

and ooze red tears

of guilt’s self doubt.

It’s like standing

in the cold damp

of the crypt’s breeze

as it shivers

the bones beneath;

as it eats away

whatever is left

of my warm heart.

These are the never healing scars

feeding greedily

on my sanity.

This silence leaves me numb.

~~~

I would gladly

listen to your cursed hatred,

feel your sword thrusts

ripping my heart,

while willingly eating

your poisoned apple lullabies

than listen to one more silent second.

~~~

The truth is

there is more destructiveness

in this bleak,

black silence

than in the act

of stabbing to death

all the poems 

I have ever written.

~~~redzone 2.25.15

Author's Note

...thanks for reading...

Reviews

[katie]

"It’s like standing
in the cold damp
of the crypt’s breeze
as it shivers
the bones beneath;
as it eats away
whatever is left
of my warm heart."

Really great imagery!
The format makes the reader take it all in instead of just reading through. I really enjoyed this poem! Wonderfully written! Keep it up!

[redzone]

thank you for the wonderful review Katie.. you know, if I were one of those poets who tweaks and edits their writes constantly, there are a couple of changes I would make in this poems format, but I am not. Usually I allow a poem to sit for a day or two after I've written it to make sure it's how I want to say it (which formatting is important I think) and then it is done, finished finito!! lol... So I am glad you mentioned you thought the format drew people into the poem, cause it made me realize that perhaps I should just leave it be..

I like this poem, I know sounds funny, but sometimes you write something and it's okay, but you put it aside and forget it.. this one stuck because it is so real, the feel of it... anyway, thanks you again for reading it and for a really wonderful comment..

[KL Wilson]

I had shivers reading this the way you write has a way of connecting deeply

[Sami Khalil]

"feel your sword thrusts
ripping my heart,
while willingly eating
your poisoned apple lullabies"

You release the silence of the wounds in this powerful write dear poet. May the healing begins...Excellent...:)......

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow. Despite its dark nature, I have to say this is one of my absolute favourites of yours. Yes. Silence can be deadly.

[Lydia Shutter]

The loneliness and desolation in your words is palpable in this write, Curt. It is true, often being alone is what people fear most...especially as they get older. (Not us, of course. We are still 30, right? right????) When the walls echo only silence and the dust mites are the only life around, it is difficult to deal with life. A very "nice" write, Curt....but a very sad one. Lydi**

[Blue Sky]

there is more destructiveness
in this bleak,
black silence

very nicely rendered, nice to read your work Curt!

Rena~

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of that feeling of "living without you is worse than with you" even if the relationship is bad...some of us cling to it just to have someone...even if we know better.

[Rana Adalwolfa Simon]

I enjoyed this piece. The length of each line is biting and strong. I feel, however, that there is far more to this piece. The stanza breaks are well-placed, but I feel like, although the topic is consistent, the view of the topic has shifted too drastically to keep it all in one poem. There's more to this than you've given us, and it shows. I think you have more of a 3-parter here, and if you allow some time to pull out the rest of the message from the second and third stanzas, you'll have that 3-part series. I hope to see more from you, and perhaps more from this piece.

[redzone]

Hi Rana, perceptive review... yes there is much more to this story than what is written. there is tension between these words and those not spoken (written), but I fear to write them all, that it would take away from the tension and from allowing the reader to form their own perceptions and views of what is written. Not sure if I have succeeded in doing this, but I think that poetry is better if it opens up for the reader (as well as the writer) sharp pathways to seeing different views of life, art, aesthetics, even while the subject matter is familiar to all... Anyway, I really appreciate your review and the ideas you present here.... who knows, perhaps there will be more coming... ;0)

[Akshay Takker]

If only I could find words to express my delight of coming across such a piece of writing.
Great job Done...