Coffee??

Coffee??

it was eminent to me

the rain made her look scrawny

in that nonchalant colored sweater.

though a left over pinch or her perfume

made for a tasty, if reckless,

desire to stare at her endlessly.

and while only a minor affection,

I was still puzzled

when she stopped, turned and

asked, “care to join me for coffee”?

redzone 5.20.16

For the 10 word challenge, words: eminent, rain,

scrawny, nonchalant, pinch, reckless, tasty, minor,

puzzled, perfume.  

Author's Note

had to try my hand at this 10 word challenge...
thanks for reading...

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

I think you did a fabulous job. :)

[redzone]

now who is being too kind".... sorry Ana, I am as usual being my silly old self... I am glad you liked it.. it was fun to write and to also make it a 10/10 poem... are you going to do one?? or have you already and I missed it??

[Matching Socks]

I have not done one, no. :)
You haven't missed it.

[Lyn Anderson]

Great job -- a wonderful addition to the challenge -- they definitely make us think, eh?

[redzone]

yes they do.. I do like doing them... KL
but you know I left an error just for you and you missed it.. **sigh** no worries, there is always the next time... lol

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, it's pretty subtle. I didn't want to seem like a total b*tch in the feed.:) Creative use of eminent and commas -- but thinking the placement of the question mark would be better on the inside.:)

[redzone]

I did look up the word eminent and one definition is "noteworthy" or "conspicuous".. "it was noteworthy/conspicuous (eminent) to me... the ? outside the quotes was one I left for you as is the word "or" instead of "of" in line 4 - a pinch or her perfume, really should be of her perfume... Kl, you are never a 'b' period and never to me in any case... I do not always make mistakes on purpose, but I always like when you point them out...

perhaps I tease with you too much, sorry...

[Lyn Anderson]

didn't see the or cause I read it of. three times, I might add. no such thing as too much teasing when it's meant in jest.

[Pryde Foltz]

Sounds like a great afternoon. Love this write, Curt:)

[redzone]

thanks Pryde... it was, and written while drinking a coffee in a midtown cafe... You are always welcome to join me Pryde.. at least metaphorically ;0)