Unfinished Poems 2

Snippets Unfinished Poems 2

sometimes I think my attempts at poetry
read more like a lost echo
bouncing off walls
in monotonous monotones
of over and over again
blank stares of stale words.
~~~
sometimes I think I am
sitting on a boulder in the middle
of a raging river
of white cap words,
drowning metaphors of
mile high verbal falls
and synapses of nouns
torn apart against the rocks
of an outmoded social system
where art has disappeared in the rapids
and all I want to do is scream…

Author's Note

...thanks for reading

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

As long as words like this are written, art will never disappear, Curt. There are no lost echos here....only brilliant metaphors and incredible imagery. You don't give yourself enough credit. When the white caps are rough, it's time to hold onto those metaphors and body surf into another poem....and you did that. Wonderful work...and "nice" too. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

Great music and wonderful poetry. Again so many good statements to be the title in the poem my friend. Life lead us to places of decisions. I believe we must know darkness to appreciate the light. Powerful words and thoughts left a lot for the reader to ponder. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[1VJ]

I think all poets feel and think this way, redundancy would be our demise. Your snippets are better than many completed poems. You need to give yourself more credit, but then again, you are a poet...

[redzone]

Hi Paloma, have to admit your saying "you are a poet" made my day... thanks... it is funny how redundancy is the enemy of poets and all artists I think... after all life itself is not limited to a few things, it is boundless and limitless...

must tell you that I wrote these 4 "snippets" over a period of time and they all came from different thoughts but once I wrote them down the thoughts stopped and I was left with a few lines on a page of paper... I have hundreds of such papers with incomplete thoughts and so took them and tried to use the book formatting here at WC with each one being a chapter... so its 4 snippets inside a snippet book... lol... maybe I will add more at some point...

but Paloma, really, thank you for your comments... they are appreciated...

[Kelly Scheppers]

I really liked the literary references you made here, Curt - "the white cap words, drowning metaphors, high verbal falls and synapses of nouns."

[redzone]

thank you Kelly... I like to do this occasionally as for me it helps to have words paint a scene rather than just state something.... glad you didn't think it was over done...

[Papaya]

Sometimes is feels like people read us as an afterthought and even when they do you wonder do they understand what your message is, or is it lost on them. I like these snippets Red.

[redzone]

thanks Ana I wasn't sure what to do with these half finished snippets, they have been sitting around for a while now... sometimes I think people do not take the time to read thoroughly and think about what they have read.... but I think there are some (you re an example) who reads and thinks who gets he tenor of a poem and then you leave wonderful comments like the one above... not just on my poems but on all I have seen where you left part of yourself on a poem... pretty special I would say...

[Papaya]

: )

[redzone]

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