flow.flow.flow.flow.

Continuous

All Around

Surrounds You

Suffocates Me

Blame

Guilt

Acts. All Done

Past

No. Present

Future.

..Maybe

Love?

Forget it.

Belief. Dreams. Hope

Pray?

Fictitious. Mirage. UnReal.

Truth.

You canNot rely.

No one there. anywhere. ever.

You. You.

You must do.

Jump. Fly. Succeed.

You are Your Own Wings...

No Rentals. No Returns.

Just...

You.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

I think you're going about this poem wrong. Though it is a clever message that takes a vivid reader to grasp it:
"You must do. Jump. Fly. Succeed. You are your own wings. No rentals. No returns." My favorite stanzas. What I mean about you're going about this poem wrong is that you need to make sure your reader knows what you're trying to convey. That is the key to writing a good poem: the reader's attention, the reader's learning of the message, the reader's comprehension, the reader is becoming influenced. Overall, I give this poem a 9/10. [: