Clarity

This is about a vision of someone who saved me from committing suicide.

I once saw a light,

A fleeting frame.

It danced across my vision,

No longer tame,

I once heard a whisper,

A voice that I know.

It called to me gently,

Don't let go.

I once smelled a reason,

A vision of two.

It told me of love,

And what it could do.

I once tasted a sweetness,

Of life once more.

It allowed me to see,

How his heart tore.

I once felt his presence,

And held to it tight.

It saved my sad soul,

With the strength of his might.

Reviews

[Amit Amola]

This one was good.
Impressive work.
But looks like you left it unfinished.
It could be elongated Renee!
I think you don't write poetry much.
But seeing this I think you should try it more often.
See you later miss.

[17thWhitePrince]

This poem is so great =D

"I once tasted a sweetness,
Of life once more.
It allowed me to see,
How his heart tore."

Well written indeed !!!

[Reneé H]

Thank you!!

[17thWhitePrince]

Anytime =P

[Sami Khalil]

A nice write...:)

[soliloquy]

Wow...you nailed this. This is well done.