She-Beast

I always thought the beast could be tamed 

Held forever by words, she was defamed 

I always thought I could control 

The dark side that somehow makes me whole 

I always thought she was weak and sad 

But she was building strength, I had made her mad 

She was always furious, at the whole world 

Her anger swirled and raged and purled 

It grew into a tidal wave 

My body her anger did enslave  

As much as I like to think she's a separate part of me

Sometimes she's the only part I can see

Reviews

[Stefon Napier]

I feel like you left the speaker slightly ambiguous. i thought it was a guy talking about a women but it could have just as easily been a women speaking about her inner self. I do feel like this poem could have been stronger. I feel the potential. I say this because of the subject you chose to talk about. Anger sort of leaps up at you of the page and I didn't get that feeling. Maybe I wasn't supposed to but that's what I expected. All around though, this poem has a lot going for it and a strong author at its back. Keep going.

[Rhea752]

Thx :D

[Aehr]

This poem is certainly dark, but I enjoyed it. We all have a dark side that surfaces every once in a while, and you captured that essence well. How long can you fight a part of your own self? There's not much you can do to win over your own deepest desires. I love the third stanza. Could give a case of the chills to an unsuspecting reader. ;)

Well done. Keep writing. X

[Dr. Wood ?]

for you age..this is quite outstanding...We all have this other self lurking within..Although with age you manage to control it there is still no telling when he might resurface....Good poem

[Rhea752]

Thanks :)

[Peter H]

good poem i believe well this is my philosophy is that we accept the good with the bad we don't descriminate all of our negative thoughts thinking the world is handy and dandy and we must always be good sometimes evil is neccesary sometimes her way of doings things is neccesary sometimes diplomacy is'nt the option anymore more so i think we must keep that little bit of negative for times when its useful the world is'nt as eloquent as anyone wants to believe and sometimes bad is good :)

[Rhea752]

Lol no the world definitely isn't as elegant as it is portrayed. Thank you very much for the review!! :)

[prashant harsh]

chaos within :)

[Rhea752]

Thanks :)

[MoriartyMesa]

I found rage and anger but check by an Angry spirit.

[Rhea752]

Thank you :)

[LapseOfMind]

Anger is often times a dominating force in our lives, though often times we dont see it. Once let out it can

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much :)

[LapseOfMind]

Lol I didnt get to finish my comment, my phone got all wonky and screwed up

[Rhea752]

Lol :P

[Baby Ricochet]

I dated her for awhile.

[Rhea752]

Lol thanks :)

[Tai Ryens]

Such a beast lurks within all of us. It only takes the right moment to unleash itself.

[Rhea752]

Thank you :)

[Saumya]

this poem reflects the inner side of yourself....!!
which is really great, rather the characteristics present in everyone...!!
well done my friend...!!

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much :D