The Girl

The girl is of water 

The girl is of tears 

The girl hates her life 

The girl has her fears 

The mother don't like her 

The mother don't care 
The mother is fire

The girl she can't bear 

The father is tired 

The father is drunk 

The father don't know 

The girl ain't a punk 

The sister just left her 

The sister is gone 

The sister don't call 

The girl wrote a song 

The girl runs away 

The girl is in pain 

The girl finds the ocean 

The girl sat and sang 

The ocean is water 

The ocean is tears 

The ocean accepts her 

The girl lost her fears

Author's Note

I know I say don't when it should be doesn't don't leave any negative comments on that please it's poetry in a little girls eyes.

Reviews

[Jordan A. Wilson]

this was a great read

[Amanda]

This is really great and I really relate to it. Keep up the good work

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love the repetition and the way of the rhymes. Great work as always :D

[Sarah W. French]

I really like this poem. The repetition was done in a way that kept the story going. I also like that the girl feels safer at the end. Very well written!

[Remember Courage]

This poem is really deep and connected. I really can understand it and in a way it really is symbolic. I love the whole mom is fire and your water its cute. you're a fantastic writer and you believe in yourself more because only jealous people would tell negative things to you. I loved it.

[Shelly Meyer]

I love this poem. I have felt these feelings myself. Very well written and I hope to read more from you. Thank you for the review of my first chapter, as well.

[Owlgirl]

I love how the ending can be interpreted in different ways, it's very well written and the fact there was a rhyme scheme made the already amazing flow even smoother. Great work. It's a gorgeous poem and has so much emotion just flowing out of it. :)

[Perfect Mistake]

This is amazingly amazing! I loved the rhyming and had lots of raw emotion within every stanza. Good work :3

[Amila Jay]

Wow. I like the way the poem rhymes and the story hidden behind the words. Great poem :))

[Celeste]

Wow, as with your other poems, this was able to show a complete story in so few words and lines! Amazing job. I love how you ended it with the ocean, especially since you started with describing the girl as of water and tears.

Keep writing!