Flutter by, Butterfly

First Haiku!!!

Flutter by, oh little one

Your wings bring my soul to life

Bring color to my world

Author's Note

My first haiku. I tried to follow the 5-7-5 rule, and I have no idea how this on is. Reviews please!!!

Reviews

[Cerise]

very well done..:D

[Belinda]

I am soooo bad at haikus. haha! This is good! short but to the point! haha. its really pretty too@

[eglantine]

You have a few extra syllabells in the first and third lines, but in mordern haiku's it's acceptable. Traditionally, they are meant to be read both from line 1 to the end as well as line 3 to the top.

[AK]

Wow! Great haiku! I can never write these things myself... But really it brings along with it such vivid imagery and thick aura! Keep writing!

[Aehr]

thank you! :)

[AK]

But really, I should be thanking you for this wo-oonderful haiku! Seriously this one is just awesome!

[Aehr]

:P its my first....

[AK]

And one of the best I've ever read! You should really try writing some more whenever you can! :)

[Aehr]

I did write another one... Check out 'The Golden Touch' if you want to

[AK]

Oh Rhea, I just noticed that it doesn't follow the 5-7-5 syllable scheme!

[AK]

*This poem I mean

[Aehr]

it doesn't? when they say 5-7-5, do they mean words, or syllables?

[Aehr]

AK, wikipedia says its a 5-7-5 word phrase series, but it should have 17 syllables or less
Sorry if I'm rude! :P

[AK]

Well, I always thought it was syllables and I think my English teacher said the same..
But I'm sure it isn't 5-7-5 words! Look at haikus like-
Melodic starlight
Serenade us with your songs
In the twilight hours

Shy little songbird
Where is your colur now?
On this dreary day

[Aehr]

oh.. i guess its my bad

[AK]

But then again, I heard the modern haiku rules changed or something..I really don't get it much. This is the classic thing but not the kdoern one or whatever, basically I don't know for sure! This is such a lovely poem though!

[Aehr]

thanks... i did what wikipedia said... :/

[AK]

Did you click on the webpage called 'Haikus in English' or the page called 'Haikus'?

[Aehr]

nope, just the description :P