At Sunset

Round orange disk in the sky

Ablaze and full of life

Silky golden strands of light

Spread across, as if slit by a knife

 

Casting its orange shadow on the sea

I see it through my window

A balmy colour before my eyes

Enough to raise spirits, so low

 

Drawing hope from the drowning sun

Watching it deluge into the sea

All is at rest, peaceful and calm

The most wonderful sight that can be 

 

              

 

                                                                                                   

 

Author's Note

A poem I wrote about sunset. Tell me about it!!!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. Good to appreciate nature gifts. I agree with your thoughts in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Erinne S.]

I like how you expressed the imagery in this piece and also the color changes in your words added even more to it. I enjoyed reading. You did a great job.

One suggestion... to help with the flow in your first stanza I think it would be better if you had your last line worded like this. "Spread across, as if slit by knife." Just take out the 'a' and I think it sounds smoother, in my opinion. It is your poem though so you can write it however you please. Again though you did a great job!

~Erinne

[Shreyas Tripathy]

The imagery of the sun setting down is so beautiful ... And it is brought out with real passion by you here .. Very nice poem !

[Shubham's View]

Imagery in one of it's better forms! Well done!

[afra]

wow i love it ...one of the best ...well done

[eglantine]

great descriptive poem, good use of imagery, utilizing color (not text color though, I've never been a fan of that). thanks for sharing... made me miss the sunsets from back home

[Aehr]

aww... thanks!