Oxygen Required

They say I need to be stronger

Because a weakling can't survive

In this world of competition 

Of struggle, and of strife

They say I should be more decent 

I should know what to say and what not

Impulsiveness just leads to problems

And I shouldn't speak a lot

Some say I'm a little too crazy

That I should be a little at ease

They all just go on judging me

Society can never be pleased

Am I supposed to be perfect?

Can they not accept my flaws?

Am I a machine, supposed to run,

According to their dumb old laws?

I'm a thirteen year old lass

They make me feel like I'm old

Like I should know my decisions

And do just what I'm told

I'm so pinned to  what they think

Limited to what they say

It's so stuffy in here, it's hard to breathe

They've even taken Oxygen away

Author's Note

Pleasing society is impossible. END OF STORY.
:P

Reviews

[AK]

Great poem! And I must agree with you. We all have different opinions, taboos and expected behaviour from others around us. What is pleasing to one is displeasing to another. I believe that it is important to keep your identity, your character and your flaws because they, in the end, make you who you truly are. Some people will accept you, some may not and knowing this fact will take anyone a mile ahead.
As long as your happiness and peace of mind are intact, all's well.
I love the way you wrote it and titled it 'Oxygen Required'. It makes me wonder if you were playing at phrasing your title 'decently' and formally, much like what a robot would probably say (if it required oxygen that is). Lovely piece, keep writing!
P.S-I think you spelt 'decent' as 'descent'.

[Aehr]

thnx :D
I'll edit it... haha

[AK]

:)

[Flutterby aish]

Wow rhea this is............OSSAM!!!!

[Aehr]

thnx :)

[PurpleQuartz]

Sometimes it feels like society is trying to change our identity, and make us all into the same faceless person. It is hard to be yourself but in the long run it is so much more worth it! Marvelous work Rhea!

[Aehr]

i agree.
thank you :)

[Frieda P]

This is great, I love how the oxygen in this piece is depleted. Society makes many demands on our mind and spirit...you're young, the best advice I can give you is be true to who you are....speak up if you have an opinion. We don't always get it right, it's a process, such is life...live and learn is not a rumor. Good one!

[Aehr]

thank you, for the review and for the advice :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, you'll find being pleasing to everyone is not all it's chalked up to be, seriously does deplete the oxygen supply, you're a smart cookie!

[Aehr]

haha thnx again :D

[junaid altaf]

well the society is a menace of traditionalism and materialism

[Aehr]

it is, isn't it? I hate it. Especially when you have to run by their rules!

[junaid altaf]

thats wat gives birth to rebels

[Aehr]

yep.

[junaid altaf]

and extremists too

[critic h]

the only mistake is the spelling of decent. you are absolutely correct. they have taken away tryrannically the life giver.