catch me, i'm bleeding

when a love is lost tragically, the beating heart begins to drip

raw joy imploding, tracking

grief toward love lost (raw);

sudden, encumbered

and marked by blight.

 

enamored by memory,

gone now, replaced by

blood, staining bright.

 

falling into sharpened

thought, falling until

caught.

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “Shadows,” by Lindsey Stirling

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[B]

I have to say i find your writing moving
though brief
but it is quite unique

[dan]

I thought of you when I included this song to accompany the write; I don't know if you like dance and I'm a newcomer to it, but violinist Lindsey Stirling was classically trained in violin and dance. Don't know why it made me think of you...take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

Good words and amazing video. Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

Thank you John, I appreciate your kind words. take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dan.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we bleed from the heart with our pens...and the paper catches it and us....before we just fall into oblivion....

[dan]

Thank you for the insightful read/review, much appreciated. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

This is a great write Dan. I always enjoy your creativity when writing. At times I feel stuck in formats I know and understand but reading your work opens my mind to new things :) Great piece

[dan]

Aaron, Thank you! I learn more here from all the other great writers (including you) than I could ever learn in a college creative writing course. take care...dan

[Philip Muls]

The music adds 'raw joy' to the poem. The poem to me speaks of catharsis.

Very powerful Dan!

[dan]

Philip, yes Lindsey Stirling's music adds a nice kick to my writing. And catharsis is a nice motivational aspect to the write. Thanks so much for the read/review. take care...dan

[Not here]

i really liked this and the music went great :)

[dan]

Thanks david. Yeah, electric violin has a special type of rock dynamic to it that sounds so different, so cool IMHO. Thanks for the review. take care...dan

[ANTO]

Loved the dripping thoughts and format conveying the same rawness. The blood that carried the adrenaline and hormone fuelled excitement of amour chills and ekes out in sorrow.
Strong brief piece from you Dan.

[dan]

The dripping of a heart stabbed by the loss of a love pounds like water torture in the mind. Thanks so much for the visit and the insightful review. take care...dan