When Words Fail

Must you lie there mocking me so?
You know there is much I wish to say.

No expression
or explanation.
You taunt me with your pale,
blank face.

My words struggle,
fail.
Unable to break the surface,
tension increases
with each passing moment.
This deafening silence
I don't understand.

STOP!!


Inhale.
Exhale.

Be still.

Quiet.

Now lets try again.

Reviews

[kelvin]

This is something every writer in some point and time endures and you brought out the aggravation of it with every word I can feel your agony very relatable read and as always keep writing fellow writer

[R. L. Ives]

Thank you. It makes me smile to know that I have written something that others can relate to. I'm doing what i enjoy, and I want to continue to enjoy what I do.

[kelvin]

Exactly and you're very welcome and we as writers should encourage each other to do so.

[R. L. Ives]

Absolutely. It makes me very frustrated when other criticize (not critique constructively). We are very sensitive souls us writers, because we do share our heart and soul.

[kelvin]

yes indeed some find much pleasure in trying to break down someone else spirits sometimes its jealousy and some simply just think their better then everyone else and know it all.

[rubie]

I cannot think of a better way to break free from writer's block than to confront it head-on and write about it! Bravo!

[R. L. Ives]

Thank you for your review.
Wanting to write but hitting walls drives me to distraction. I tend to over think things, even this. Wondering if its because I worry too much about format and not just getting the words on paper and them forming it.

[rubie]

Yes, over-worrying in itself can prohibit the flow of words. Just let them tumble out....

[1 Deep]

Sounds like writers block. Good write, it comes off as very real, like you really just wrote how you felt. That's what poetry is all about. Writers can relate to this

[R. L. Ives]

It was exactly how I felt. If I had been alone while writing this, I would have screamed it out loud. Thank you for reviewing.

[Deanna]

Been there and felt the same way. ): Really, really like this. (:

[R. L. Ives]

Thank you. It's very frustrating but hopefully I will get inspired soon.

[Deanna]

This is too funny. When I read it I totally thought you were writing about trying to talk to someone you love after having a argument!! Did not read it any other way. But when I read your response I can see what you were actually writing about. I love it!! (:

[R. L. Ives]

Haha, it is really. When I wrote it I wrote it I wasn't thinking about anything but not being able to write anything. I read it again after Quin mentioned it and sure enough, it could be taken either way. Perspective/interpretation, almost as individual as fingerprints.

[quinfinn]

well, this is exquisite double entendre . it could be about writer's block or it could be about the silent treatment from a significant other. either way, it is an awful and hateful feeling. nicely expressed!

[Sheila Kline]

There are those times when one must just step back, take a deep breath and look at the situation with a different perspective. This seems to be one of those times!! Thank goodness when one is willing to try again!!

[R. L. Ives]

I've had the worse time trying to write today. I think I have an idea, sit down, maybe write a few lines and then nothing. Perhaps I'm trying too hard.

[Sheila Kline]

That might work for you - just like taking time to step back and look at your day with a fresh pair of "eyes" into the soul of the moment. Perhaps there is something that is particularly of more interest today than it was yesterday. It is hard to continue, but I once made a pledge to myself to write something every day, no matter how insignificant it seemed, or how "bad" it was. It has worked for me. Don't be harsh on yourself - just let the words flow!
Good luck!!