Drink Up!

Is it really worth it?

Drink Up!
© 2019 Sachiko Ruaya




Socially light open the lips

Heavy Upon the heart

It’s tempting… proof of belonging

Proof of affirmation;

Based on a Million Dollar sip

Determined by gulped Irish Cream

Mmm…

Whiskey that navigates smoothly, through the cavity

a pleasant flame;

a pleasant burn that trickles down your throat
(Isn’t it wonderful?)

Comforting warmth?

In exchange?

A cell crushing headache.

Your words are slurred, dribbling
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Language is bounced…deflected off ears

Comfort as an alcoholic resides of a pleasant burn

Your blood is red wine

Your tears for in crystals of Vodka

The pleasant burn; the pleasant flame?

Morphs into a demon

Processed by short longing comfort,

You left the condoms on the bedside;

Pills taped onto the mirror

Obviously, you wouldn’t have known, right?

You make non-existent love on an unknown bed…

Unknown place…

Unknown bedside…

Unknown…

Unknown…

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Author's Note

HELLOHA! AFTER ONE WHOLE YEAR I'M BACK!! I hope everyone has been doing good! This is a poem I wrote in class during health when I was bored. Enjoy!

Reviews

[RacialRainbow]

Very much worth the read. I don't have much of a critique, but personally I think you could have used more beverages with a meaning. (If that makes sense) I enjoyed how you used "Your tears for in crystals of Vodka" and "Determined by gulped Irish Cream" and my favorite "Whiskey that navigates smoothly, through the cavity". I just think with your talent you could have dove deeper, if you get what I am saying. Overall I give this a 9/10 that last little thing I said about diving deeper being the last point. Unless the short and sweet chop was what you were aiming for then bravo! You can have your 10/10. :)

[Sachi Ruaya]

Haha thanks for the feedback! HIghly appreciated! To be honest I'm actually still not at the age to drink... actually wayyy below the age to drink. I wrote this in health class!

Thank you for your review!

Sachiko

[nathan]

My favorite parts are:
"pleasant flame"
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"morphs into a demon"
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... and "language bouncing off ears"
Like someone else said, the poem is a wild ride!

[Coyote Poetry]

A wild ride in the poem. Your mind was running wild. I liked how you took the reader with. Thank you for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[Mrudula Rani]

I am glad you are back, back with a spectacular poem. I never had a drink of alcohol, that might disqualify me from commenting on the effects of alcohol... but I do know the longing of addiction, I can't start a day without coffee and find an excuse to drink several more cups although the day. I loved the format of your poem it is stunningly beautiful and cascades like a smooth drink. Well done.A very Happy 2019.

[Sachi Ruaya]

Hello! I am back from two years ago! I also have yet to drink alcohol when I posted this poem two years ago. I simply observed my environment and drunk people to make this poem haha! I also read and researched a bit to get an idea about what alcohol feels like to drink.