Heating Up

Heating Up  (A Senryu)

 

Simmering kisses

Bring me to the boiling point

We evaporate

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Clever senryu. I like this very much. Totally visual.

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

So clever and Steamy!! love this! What a smiler this little gem is! lol

[rubie]

Glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
Thank you!

[andrew mitchell]

very clever and I like clever and I like Wit!:)

[icelandicblue]

The water cycle of love. You could not have condensed another syllable. It truly is perfect and can be said in one breath for that is all you need between kisses.

[rubie]

Your response is better than the poem itself!
Thank you for your kind words...

[icelandicblue]

For the first 6-7 years that I wrote publicly I wrote only Haikus and Senryus. They look easy but they are not, and yours are quite clever. Much skill goes into this kind of writing that is often overlooked. I've always been drawn to them, and you write them beautifully. I never tire reading them. I find them to be simply beautiful.

[rubie]

I've been writing poetry for several years, but only recently began trying my hand at these forms. Fun to play around with them!!

[icelandicblue]

One day, a woman with whom I became friendly with, urged me to wrote longer pieces. That was in 2006 yet the haiku still calls to me. I loved paring down my verbosity into the simplest, yet most impactful form I could find.

[rubie]

I understand completely. Simple is always best, especially where words are concerned. So much can be said with very few words...

[icelandicblue]

Weaving a story out of 17 syllables is a gift most precious.

[Adam Adams]

Ah... you got me!

You speak the heart in a few manifest words for sure. Lovers 'neath the sky, winds across the room, warmth ov'r the hearts & the pleasure of night in the doom. Excellent! Lol

[rubie]

thanks for stopping by, and for leaving such a kind review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice metaphor here...clever senryu.

j.

[rubie]

thanks, jacob.
had fun playing with this form.