SEASONAL CHANGE

Another experiment in first thoughts as poems

In the bungalows of happiness

householders put up their

can goods of well-wishes

Out back

the kids are

stoking bonfires of resentment

in derelict steel drums

Darkness and winter

are waiting at the end of the street

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Darkness and winter. Two words that are rarely used together. But I see your point. ;) I love them both and I am sure winter must be very beautiful (we don't have winter here in the Philippines). What I like about this poem is the transformation of a simple scenery to something philosophical. Brilliant. :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Nice metaphors. I for one love the winters over summer.

[OTownPete]

Bonfires of resentment...how many of those have we stoked in the times of our lives?

[Tam Warink]

If Andy Warhol ever tried to execute something with a surrealist brush it might look something like this. But then we'd have to nickname him Evangeline or something a bit more 19th century and with just a sprinkling of coal dust to accentuate the highlights. You serve a seasonal gruel for breakfast? What's with that? O_o

[Neon]

Liked the new thoughts on darkness and winter ... loved the imaginary as well.

[Latifa]

Darkness and winter

are waiting at the end of the street
i like this alot

[Rita L. Sev]

Beware the quiet neighborhood... Great imagery in this John.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Here you have a lot of imagery going on in the lines of this work...you pace the theme and give us a focal point in each stanza...

[Pryde Foltz]

What goes on behind the walls of suburbia? A short poem with a tomes-worth of meaning.