Fate of Nothing

off the top of my head...

And the light struck the tree..
and the tree fell..
and the ground shook.

 

And he walked by..
and my head turned..
and my heart stopped.

 

And our eyes met..
and we looked into each others eyes..
and nothing.

 

 

And I saw the flash strike through my window,
while he walked by,
when our eyes met.

 

And when the tree fell,
my head turned,
and we looked into each other’s eyes.

 

And when the ground shook,
my heart stopped,
and nothing.

 

And the fate of nothing is what brought us together in the end.

 

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Man! This poem gave me such a frantic feeling. My heart was
racing. I love the way you stretched out the jiffy and put it
in slow motion. Bravo! Bravo! In case you don't know......
I love it!

[Kaitlin]

wow! This is definitely my favorite so far :)

[Khaaki]

really nice... keep it up

[poetic soul]

such fate of nothing, is good, in the end i guess!! a very mixed emotions' write....liked it....keep it rolling...

love,
poetic soul

[deeps]

Now this is pure wonderful my friend
I can really feel this and it's a lonely
and beautiful feeling all in one.
Well written and intriquing.

[Essie]

Rachael! I loved this poem. From the tree falling to the eyes meeting, I was incredibly intrigued by every single line of this poem. It's deep and mysterious and fascinating at the same time. Great write!

[An owl on the moon]

I found myself reading through your words several times, so intrigued by the nature of this poem. I loved the flow, the sense of mystery, and the subtle references... Very interesting write. I loved it!

[bluessadmood]

Oh what loveliness ..for sure thats fate,how i liked you mixed striking light ,chaos of nature with him passing by..
Light struck ,and tree fell,and ground shook..As you walked by,You turned my head,stopped my heart
Our eyes met and we looked into each others..eyes,I saw that flash strike through my windows
As you walked by ,you shook my heart as i looked into your eyes..I saw so much light
lovely write..