My Own Dream

I’m living in my own dream, experiencing what I see when I am no longer awake.

This road ahead is unknown and mysterious, still I walk on

Never knowing what is coming in advance.

 

It is my arrival into a world I have never seen and believe is anything but real;

A break from reality is what I now live in.

Each step I continue to take is pulling me closer to the still foreign land.

 

My eyes see nothing clearly;

My head will not break from this haze.

However, I know this dream is my reality.

Reviews

[Dutch Jr.]

I like this work, the element of mystery and limited detail adds to the mood, but I like when a wor appeals to at least one of my senses. What does this dream world look like? You don't have to add another stanza, but just a liitle sights that can put the reader into your dream. We get the full effect that way...

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. Life will have many twist and turns. Need to stay alert and be strong. Education and dreams can take us a long way. A very good ending to a excellent poem. No weakness in this poem. Just good logic and a lot of hope in the words.
Coyote

[Michael X]

this depthfully charged poem has a sense of mysteriousness about it that
creates a sense of wonderlust, as if the motive behoind the meaning is
a sense of yearning and longing to explore, i believe each reader can
draw there own conclusion, a testament to the your skills, awsome job

[Kaitlin]

wow thank god. finally you write a positive poem about reality. and yea, this is definitely because of your lover. =]

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this. I thought it was good. I agree with it. Thanks for sharing. :)

[An owl on the moon]

There are times those lines are blurred... what we sense and see and feel.. Yet you keep moving on and show a courage to face it... come what may. Excellent write.

[Hippy]

i like it "however i know this dream is my reality" very nice line

[The Perfectionist]

Second line, I think it would sound better to say 'still I walk on' instead of 'I still walk on'. I also don't see why you have a 'To' at the start of the third line. Pretty sure you mean 'break from reality' not 'break form reality'. Not sure the sentence following it makes sense either.

The last line is ominous and the last stanza is your best, though the brevity of this poem just barely manages to be eerie and then it's over, just as it should be. Leave the reader wondering.

Just clean up your English.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is otherworldly. You dropped us into this void. IT could be reality, a dream or a lucid dream. The brain doesn't seem to know the difference. I found myself confused as I read this poem. I couldnt figure out which I was experiencing. This is some deep thought. I love the way it all fits together.