~final.departure~

@ last day of college

 

Clock reminds me I have to leave,

As four long years have just gone by,

Few days I found myself a bit low,

And on few days I took a high... 

I fell over and over again,

You tested me a lot,

But I never called it quits,

Even though I dint know the plot...

It brings me joyful memories,

I’ll miss the times I spent with you,

I wish you could hear me when I say,

This journey would be incomplete without you..

We’ll meet again for sure and soon,

Cuz I don’t believe in goodbyes,

Till then just remember my smile,

While I silently hide away my sighs...

Author's Note

comments are welcome :)

Reviews

[J. Viands]

Strong sorrowful expression of time passing but I do feel like it has the potential to be smoother. No one pulls it off every time keep it up

[Sakshi]

I have started working on the flow of this one :) Thanks for reading!

[UnendingOceans]

Feels like there ought to be rhythm here, but it's stuttering a bit. If you could smooth it out, I think it'd speak clearer.

[Sakshi]

Thanks for reading, will work on it :)

[Albarrak]

Hello SakVas .
It's nice poem , but it could be more nice, if you writes the reason of goodbye, the reason maje the reader live the event .

wish you the best

[Sakshi]

Hi Johndvictor,
This was written on the last day of my college, when the nostalgia started hitting finally. And in a subdued font, I have mentioned that under the poem's heading.
" @ last day of college "
Anyways, thanks for the review.
Cheers :)

[Albarrak]

I'm sorry . i didn't see it .

Chears

[Derek Sparks]

Sounds like you miss someone. Reminds me of the ones I've lost and how badly I wish to see them again. Cheers.

[Sakshi]

Hi dwsparks,
Yes indeed I was missing someone, but that someone was an entity - My college!read moreHi dwsparks,
Yes indeed I was missing someone, but that someone was an entity - My college!
But I am glad you could relate it to your life!
Thanks for dropping by :) Cheers!