a victory story..

Believe it or not, it happened today,

While I was lost, I found that pin in the hay..

It reminded me, of the pricks n the pain,

Which it gave me, and drove me insane..

I looked at it, with a smirk on my face,

Thinking of what should I do, and the punishment ways..

O boy! It talked back to me, taking me by a surprise,

Begging me for forgiveness, asking me its price..

Price! O no! There's no value of my sufferings, I know I have to set u right,

So that you don’t trouble anyone, and especially stay out of my sight!

O benevolent! Have mercy on me, Thou has the power to free me,

I promise I promise, I’ll do as u say, but one condition that you set me free..

I sit under the tree, thinking what to do,

Finally the apple fell, and my mind instantly decided too..

I use my strength, against the Satan who took my sleep away,

Burnt me alive, and laughed at me all the way..

I turned my pin, into the memories of my pain,

To look at it every day as it becomes my key to be sane..

Now I keep my pen down and look at the ring on my hand,

Yes, a silver lining can make a petty pin look grand..

# on the conquest of all inner and outer 'pins'

Author's Note

Thanks for reading! :)

Reviews

[writingislifex3]

it was very interesting how you used a metaphor throughout this entire poem. i did enjoy your word choices and this poem was very descriptive and i understood what you were saying. very nice job.

[Sakshi]

Thank you so much! Glad my words reached you..

[J. Viands]

Phenomenal piece flow is solid it tells a story with a message and for as descriptive as it was it was written around a metaphor… I hope you didn’t look for a pin in hay. Well done

[Sakshi]

Thanks a lot J.V for reading and telling me your opinion. Really appreciate it :)

[Suhina]

Holy moley, this is one of the best poem's I have ever read! well done mr :)

[Sakshi]

thanks a ton :)
glad you like it!