I want You

I will hold onto this single flower forever

Waiting upon your return
You will kiss me alive

You can turn a dark and twisted night into a morning star

Your smile can make any star shine its brightest

Author's Note

It's not finished yet, can anyone help? or give suggestions ?

Reviews

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Oh Trevor...I would leave it just as it is...not adding to it nor taking away from it...it is charming... only thing; "Your smile can make any star shine it's brightest" - the 'it's' should be 'its' - without the apostrophe :) Otherwise...anyone would be touched to have this written for them ...

[Citizen Erased]

Oh my, this is marvelous so far! It's sweet I like it! :D

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. oh, how endearing and enchanting ... and so amazingly melodious ... beautifully written, trevor ... very magical ... :) ...

[Cynthia]

Oh god, that's a really nice poem!!!!
It's sweet!