But Maybe

I don't want to go outside

But maybe

The sun will make me happy again

I don't want to help myself

But maybe

I deserve more than this pain

I can't stand to see your face

But maybe

Seeing you will make me stronger

I can't stand you next to me

But maybe

I'll remember why we no longer share a bed 

I won't let you tear me down

But maybe

You will be the reason I fight so hard

I still let you break my heart

But maybe

It will remind me of why I'm damaged

Reviews

[JayceeC]

This was strong except for one stanza and I'm not sure it sounds like what you meant.
I can't stand you next to me
But maybe
I'll remember why we no longer share a bed

If you are shunning a person so completely are you really likely to forget why you aren't sharing a bed?
Maybe change this to "Ill forget why we no longer share a bed." That is actually a bit more healthy point of view. forget and move on.
~Jan

[samanthaashley_]

thanks for the feedback. I guess what I was thinking was that sometimes I forget the reasons that someone has hurt me until I am physically with them. I like to live in this little fantasy world that everything was perfect, and I don't know why we don't talk anymore.. like I am missing out on something.

[hanir]

Life is full of maybes.. indeed full of uncertainties..
Nicely written.

[Eagle Cruagh]

I love this poem--- it is a true fantasy and
fantasy is needed here, because like you
and many others, life is lonely and harsh.
Talk to me .
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Emily]

I love the layout and meaning of it!
Keep it up!

[micky]

What a life time story you have told here....Great questions you have yourself but dera have you the answers...
Awesome write :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Maybe you'll find him again. Life is for love n not love is life.

[J.A. Marquez]

Facing the things that make us uncomfortable is the only way to grow from them. It is a painful process, but it can build you up in incredible ways.

[elynne]

I really like the repetitive nature of this poem. It creates a nice flow. I also think it coincides nicely with the continous cycle of thoughts that the narrator is going through. I loved it but I felt that the 2nd to last stanza was out of place. I think that maybe revising it to a stanza of how the narrator hopes to be strong and to not let this end her and putting it at the end would be more effective.
Well done!

[E G TEN]

A beautiful and such a courageous write if i might Say,
This things are never easy to digest, "But Maybe" now
Your wiser than before;) Thanks for sharing Sam!

[Rajat malik]

This poem is too sensible..... Gifted me tears #very emotional and the words are perfect.....I just pray to God to never hurt you so much in reality

[samanthaashley_]

aw thanks.. that is so nice of you. have a great day!

[Rajat malik]

You are welcome, always
Will feel great if I am of any help to you

[Carrie.]

It reads like you have decided to be done with wallowing.

The piece is perfectly good, can't wait to read when you've regained your strength.

[samanthaashley_]

thanks! I think I have :)