spanish poetry

if i read you
pablo neruda
with faux spanish lilts
will you smile at me
deliciously

listen to the inflections
in my voice
until we fall asleep
in a blanket
of momentos silenciosos.

if i read you
spanish poetry
will you
adóreme.

remind me of kindness
with your warm
liquid eyes.
i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

if i sing you
pablo neruda
to the sounds of
your guitar
are we sharing music
or poetry
or perhaps
it is
eternity.

mira...
how your silent moments
awaken such sweet
sounds
in me.
 

Reviews

[Nihad Dweidary]

This evoca can easily melt the most intractable brick. This is surely worthy of another visit, Karabelle.

I am so delighted to have featured your work this week. I have no doubt that a plethora of authors are able to walk away with a wonderful sense of satisfaction when reading your poems. They are the brightest flowers in the garden, begging to be felt, smelt, and tenderly caressed. I love these lines:

i barely comprehend
all the parts of you
i recognize.

Love, -Nihad

[L. L. Jacobson]

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In the words of Doc Brown:
"Do you know what this means????? It means that this damn thing doesn't work at all!!!!"

well, this shall suffice:
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[L. L. Jacobson]

I love the gentle interweaving of emotions and words of the Spanish language to the english dialect, the reference to the great Pablo Neruda, but your words are gallant; free, compelling; infectious of great love and all of the simple sharing that comes with it.p.s. usted es hermoso, al igual que su poes�a. Tu palabras hablan a trav�s de los labios del vino, de la m�sica y de la melod�a. Los sue�os se convierten en verdad..Oh, c�mo I deseo aprender.

[Alia December]

wow. ok first off the subject, spanish literature, is amazing all by itself, and then, the writing, which is great, and THEN you even add spanish words!!!...this made me very happy. 5 stars!

[Tony Nesca]

cool, very very good kara, really dig this, like the floe and rhythim, which to me are all-important, see ya, keep it up...

tony

[G.f. Snell Iii]

I love the mix of Spanglish. It gives the poem an exotic, playful touch. The first three stanzas are fabulous -- but then you lose your fast ball.

Don't like "warm, liquid eyes."

The next stanza brings it back up, but then the ending lands with a thud. "A" for effort, "B" for execution.

[Sarah Williams]

Neruda has always been one of my favorites...such a passionate writer of reality.

As for your piece, I truly loved every line. The way that you sprinkled it with spanish was a beautiful accent to an already amazing piece. Bravo! One of my new favorites!

[Maria G.]

Beautiful piece and the use of mixed language added a seductive touch..

[Aaron]

Maximum impact with a minimum of cluttered speech. This is a wonderful poem to speak aloud, just as you insinuate in the first stanza.

peace
aaron

[Jenni Meck]

nice nice nice! this flowed so well and the ending "how silent moments AWAKEN such sweet sounds in me" very good line. This was creative, I can visualize this...laying with the person you love, reading poetry by a fire under a cozy blanket...:::sigh::: beautifully written

[J. Thomas Parker]

yes.