Bruised and Broken

I know it's not cheery but... sometimes you just have to accept that life can suck, and get over it.

I'm bruised
I'm broken
Nobody listens at all.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
I'm all alone.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
All left behind.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
In a place I don't recognize.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
It's dark during day.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
I won't last this way.

 

I'm bruised
I'm broken
I'm ... not me anymore.

Author's Note

Well... your turn now I guess...
tell me what you hate about it...
or like about it.
Curse me for my grammar or vocabulary...
I'm listening.
Greetings

Reviews

[Ace D Portgas]

Hmm I like everything about this poem...Its very straightforward and intense and I have felt like this before and not just me I'm sure other people have to. Nice!

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like the intensity of it. Maybe you could put a little flavor to the intensity, just to put it out in a better perspective. :)
Well done, anyway!

[Lady Tyke]

It's a very real, straight to the point, I like seeing such plain writing. I think quite a few people have felt this way at one time or another and the simplicity of the poem and the rhythm of it is very much a reflection of giving up, don't care about anything that sort of thing.

[Hello, Goodbye]

this is certainly the way I have felt often.. I can understand the duplication of feelings for at times the continuation is horrid and unbearable to the point that all in mind is those words.. The resolution at the end is comforting but be warry of a vicious cycle that is despondency.. cheers..