My Haven Of Hope

When my days are rough,
And it all seems tough,
I wish you to be the shoulder,
That I can lean unhesitant, un-deviated pon'

When nothing seems alright,
And life's no more an extreme delight,
I want you to be the Shoulder,
That I sob it all, off and away on

When all life shows,
Is distrust, and disgust,
I want you to be the Shoulder,
I can find hope on

When I'm lonely in the crowd,
Of the otherwise caring people,
I want you to be the Shoulder,
That reflects endearence pon'

When I'm shaken with life,
It's injustice, it's strides,
I yearn you to be the breeze,
Who perceives me in my silence,
When no one will often not.

When I'm a deeply neglected person,
In the list of people I've been revered often,
I yearn you to be the soul,
that'll be dominant, perseverant.

When I feel uncared, rejected, dejected,misunderstood,
I want you to be the one,
I can anyways, always still count on.

When no one and nothing seems alright,
I want you to be anything and everything
That gives me a reason to smile...and pass it on.

Author's Note

All Your reviews, feedbacks and positive criticism are most welcome.
Also, please suggest me a better title to this poem , if you've anything better than the one it has currently.

Thank you for stopping by, and going through my words.I really appreciate your time you spent going through my words:)
Do let me know if you liked it.
Happy reading and writing!

-Saumya.

Reviews

[AKSHAYAVATA GUPTA]

Hope is a very devicious yes beautifully carved word. It is at same time delusional yet supportive.
It was a nice read

[Relic]

I often use A.I. proofreader but not always. https://deepai.org/chat/proofreader. It not only gives corrections but suggestions.

Your poem sheds light on the emotional part of your thinking. Emotion of some sort should always be a part of writing and you did it well here with detail. We all want to be loved and cared for.

Good writing, Sami.

[Saumya]

Thankyou for your suggestions Relic/Sami.I'm sure this will help me a lot in the time to come :)
read moreThankyou for your suggestions Relic/Sami.I'm sure this will help me a lot in the time to come :)

Thankyou for sharing your thoughts about my poem.I'm glad you liked it.
:)

[Davidgeo]

You are not alone my dear. We seek trust in spite of it because if we didn't, humans would stop having children over time. We'd all just be eating grass and jerking off in a cave. Anyone who says otherwise is suspect. You're not crazy. You just live in a crazy time. You seem to be having a good time with it. Keep it up when you can

[Saumya]

Thankyou for sharing your sentiments David :)
Glad you could relate.

[Pete]

touching. invokes emotion, honest and real thoughts. love the accompanying pic too.

[Saumya]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts about my poem,Pete.Glad you could relate.
Thanks for the rating too :)

[Dorian]

I loved this one, really nice.

[Saumya]

Thanks Dorian!😊