THE WARRIOR by Saunved

The warrior comes riding from his war...he has won in single-handed and now...he meets his army...which is tired and which had lost all hope!

He rode forth on his steed of steel,
his hands brown - bleeding sweet;
his brows furrowed in agony,
his eyes...pinched with grief!

His sword was red with crimson hate,
his shield was cracked with blows,
his helmet stunned with a thousand strikes,
his face was grim with sorrow!

He pierced his gaze upon the clouds,
and lo! They parted quickly,
his hands held high to silence the army,
the army- covered in dust!

He leaped from his horse,
upon the ground,
and embraced the dust sweet,
and then he rose silently,
and looked with pity at the army!

He leaned upon his sword of steel,
he unfastened his helmet grey,
his shield he lay upon the ground,
he breathed the air- with a curious sniff,
and felt the blood and sweat!

His army fell upon their knees,
their eyes filled with awe,
their hands saluting him in ecstasy,
their swords at his feet long...

And then...he cried, he sand, he shouted-
the victory song which he had learned,
and when he finished his song so sweet,
he showed his heart...which was deeply pierced.......

Author's Note

I think that's the way a true man should be...ignoring all pain...and going ahead just for those who depend upon him!

Reviews

[Nayan]

I love the way you have used adjectives to end the 2nd or 3rd line in some of the stanzas, like "his hands brown - bleeding sweet" or "and embraced the dust sweet" or "he unfastened his helmet grey"!
- This was really making a lovable pattern, and I expected that to happen for all stanzas.

This is a very nice poem. Really portrays what great men are like, how they endure great pain for the cause of his men and women, without them realising that...

[saunved]

Thank you so much for the constructive review...and thanks for observing the pattern...it was unintentional, but it suits the poem well!

[River Page]

Nice poem. It is well written and paints a picture of man returning from war. Perphaps someday you can show us the view from inside the soildiers own mind. This is great!

[saunved]

Oh sure! I don't know if I will be able to do that...but who knows!

[saunved]

Thanks a lot for your review!