Lets do the human thing.

A sadistic outlook on ones distaste.

your voice was shaking and your body was weak.

your bones were shattering and you could barely stand.

you did all that you could to stand up straight;

to pretend that you had the slightest bit of confidence,

but we all knew there was nothing there.

you never were much of anything.

a pile of dust that blew away with the wind.

Author's Note

i was aiming for a simple feel. let me know your what you think. :)x

Reviews

[Tony]

Excellent.

We see people who are pathetic and we feel empathy, and often support or rationalize elements of the given situation, so as to not appear reptilian in front of our peers.
But we also think,
"what a waste of space."

Well, that is my interpretation, correct me if I am wrong.

[GTVile]

I think you captured it quite well. I'm not quite sure what the victim of your words is, but you really take a condescending tone toward it. You do a good job of chilling the reader's bones. Very effective.

[Kieran James McGovern]

feeling akin to this, i think it captures the honest insight of a "survivor." i know the feelings here. good job, i plan on reading your stories soon! :)

[TTBoy28]

This could actually be taken in a sadistic and erotic way, vido. As we are all dust, for me it tells of a person used and cast-off into oblivion. Very nice!

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. haha ! ... i absolutely love this bazooka of a poem ... this is magical simplicity at its finest ... and that last line is to die for ... excellent tone ... and great title too ...

[Isolophobe]

lol ah. AHH! that is the very essence of the human thing.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Like it..!!!

I agree with Tony whole-heartedly.
This was truly a magnificent piece.
Excellent work! :)

[misha]

great job. I can feel the emotion in this piece

[Zachary_James]

EXCELLENT poem..

[J.S.B.]

wonderful. i love the imagery and the title really gets you thinking.