The Old

A Poem by sav

After everything you said

After everything you did

I miss you.

You hurt me so much

And I know you don't care but

I still miss you.

You became toxic again

And left all your friends

But I really miss you.

Things have changed

Your life has been rearranged

And I wish you missed me too.

© 2022 sav

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Ken e Bujold

Sav, this is a good poem, especially in light of your age. With a little revising it could a great poem.

I offer up this suggestion, mull it over. The final choice is always yours, because you are the Creator.
I would excise every thing but lines 1,2,3,6,(9),12 in 9 cut the but

those are the essence of what you want to say, and the bits cut out will still be hanging in the ether as it were, but left to the reader to fill in the unsaid with there own emotional responses

Ken e