Love Again

It hurts.

 

I won't let you love me again.

I just realized what a fool I've been.

I'm letting go. I'm moving on.

I don't deserve you all along.

I am giving up this game.

I won't give in to your pain.

I don't want to take your hand.

I won't fall for you again.

I have to wake up from this nightmare.

I have to be free from these lies.

I want to escape and leave you behind

Because I've fallen for someone else this time.

 

Written: 03/12/04

Reviews

[Gandré]

"I'm moving on.
I don't deserve you all along. "--------------I liked those lines. So proud, so strong, I love strong people. It is easy to let oneself go. It is difficult to make a step forward, let flow. But: it is the most enriching way.

xx lara.

[Alistair Canlin]

Fallen out of love. Always painful, cos you usually land with a bump. A great read, that you managed to stop becoming a rant, but still managed to keep all that bitterness.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

---sounds that you still were attached to him, despite meeting someone else back then. I very much relate to this poem. :) ---mishel

[Yira Simone]

Short and to the point. Succinct lines that allow the reader to see you are affirming your feelings and telling this person just what you will or won't allow in your life again. You mill it plain it won't be him. Sometimes we have to go through some stuff with a person before release just how bad they are for us. It seems your poem seconds that notion. I liked this. Thanks darling for sending this my way.-Catrina

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Yes move on if it isnt working... love the flow and the posative message of getting out of a desturctive relationship.

[Randall Richard]

not a bad write, i would change the 4th line to "i didn't deserve you all along." all along is usually focuses on the past.

[Thea M. Joy]

"I have to be free from these lies.
I want to escape and leave you behind
Because I've fallen for someone else this time."

You've made it further than I have, LOL. I'm still somewhere between wanting to escape and falling for someone else. Not a happy place, I might add.

Lovely poem and I think the rhyming works well. The last line does sort of imply that there is more to come, but I kind of like how you left it hanging rather than dragging the poem out so much that it would lose its effect. Overall, I think this is a good write!

[Adamdust]

It's the subtext that gets me in this poem. I almost wish the last line were followed by an ellipsis, but liek i said, the subtext: it kind of implies an ellipsis; not only is there more, but that it is strategically unsaid.
However, there i a cyclical nature to this situation, and the poem does agood job of revealing that hidden agenda, our minds do the same thing "forget hurtful things" and it seems likey that the unspoken of this poem reveals "and the cycle renews."

besides love, we fall for other things too. Because of the poem's last line, a reader may understand that something else is going on, not love, or that in finding lve, one must temper themselves through all the falling games that accompany such a arduous game of honesty and mistrust.

besides love, we also fall into traps. But sometimes ,love is like a trap. Not always a bad one, not all traps are designed to kill or destroy or mutilate, some are just designed to keep you. "lured into the company of a trap" aka new love, for whatever that's worth -- this time.

I know it is typical practice for reviewers to read a poem and be like "Yo, i so relate to this." And i wouldn't dare review with some life wisdom about love because that ignores the "writing" you've presented.

What i mean is: the writing contain alot of necessities, lots of needs and musts, and a whole lot of will-nots do-nots. And as much as anyone wants to feel that this is a sign of self-empowerment, i argue that there is only one line that truly empowers the poem's speaker. Line two. it is the only affirmative line, each other line is a rejection of something real, something actually happening. I don't see lines like "I will start new" "I want to recognize the value in the pain, the value in the experience" instead it says "I can't take this s**t no more" or it connotes "i'm ruined thanks to you."

not sure i got across what i was trying to articulate. What i mean to say is, line two helps me understand this as a cyclical poem. It is the most selfless and wonderful realization when through such scenarios to drop it all, focus on the self as "one who knew not then, knows better now." She doesn't say "i'm a fool" she says "i just realized . . ." and it is the realize that i'm focusing on (even if she realized that she forgot her sunglasses instead of being a fool). as buddhists will say: a life is well lived if even for the slightest moment truth is experienced and then gone forever, one who never experiences a shred of truth is a life unlived.