Outside My Window

Reflections

I lay there in the bed each night,

I see the tree in nights dim light,

I know the all is clearly right,

cus I can see my tree.

 

I don't know why I see this tree,

this tree is calling out to me,

and telling me that all is free,

and I can go to sleep.

 

Each day I start the climb that's steep,

I play the game, I join the keep,

I wrestle long in pits so deep,

so I can go back home.

 

As I get there from days long roam,

I feel the peace, turn off the phone,

I settle down with some good tome,

I end my daylight flight.

Author's Note

I like trying new forms of poem combinations.

Reviews

[Michelle Anselm]

I like the tone in this. It's almost childlike, in that simple way, very focused on the nature of the tree. It's comforting; it makes one think, "Now, I wish I had a tree of my own like that." I particularly liked this line:

"I know the all is clearly right"

because it takes "all right" and turns it into something more poetic. I dunno, a little detail like that catches my attention. (: Good work.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

LSS,
"Outside My Window"
Your tree sounds perfect. The presence of something giving beauty is inspiring and brings a place to retreat in it's simplicity. I found this poem one of a focus on and desire come down to the root of what is important: "I don't know why I see this tree. This tree is calling out to me. and telling me all is free and I can go to sleep.
This reminds me of a song or lullaby.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Last Lying Look]

I like this. It's like a little this tree is a part of you.

maybe.

i dont know. lol. that could just be wishful thinking

but yes this is a very pretty poem. it has a sense of... home.

[Michael V]

very nice, very good presentation it keeps it at a fairytale setting while letting you know its real. I love the pace and flow, it very laid back and relaxed which is implied, Nice Piece!