I Suck

A Poem:
I suck at writing poems
They always turn out bad
I can't write to rhyme
Rhyming is hard
I don't know how lyricists do it
Because it just seems complicated
I can't grab the concept
It bothers me that I can't
I always end up making a story
If I took a poetry class, I'd fail
I suck
This poem sucks
I just can't do it
It hurts my brain to try
So I gave up on it
All this because I can't write
Poems

Reviews

[ETERNITY]

Actually, Darling, THIS write is poetic just as it is! I love it!
The author admits his faults and that is so appealing especially to a female.
The ONLY line I don't like is where the author says, "It hurts my brain to try"
which sounds just like TRACE. ugh.
Every line except that one flows beautifully.

[Thomas W Case]

I like the honesty here—it’s self-deprecating, but real. The pain and frustration come through loud and clear, and that’s worth more than perfect rhyme. Feels human, unpolished, and gutsy.

[ETERNITY]

SCORPIOUS Alpha, Don't listen to Davidgeo. Nothing makes you a p***y except yourself.
If you don't like rhyming, don't rhyme.
Putting your thoughts down is good if you FEEL like it.
YOU are the MOST NON p***y I've ever known.
THIS what you've written ... is poetry.
It's awesome as you always are.

[Davidgeo]

You're both self serious idiots for being unable to recognize sarcasm.

[Davidgeo]

Crybaby Thommy Case leaving hit and run comments again.

[Thomas W Case]

You're a punk, and you are soulless...get a life, dude.

[ETERNITY]

Davidgeo, you have a problem. OR is this SARCASM again? You want to F**K or BE FUCKED?

[Davidgeo]

Smh. Get a grip people. Grow the f**k up. This some high school bullshit.

[Davidgeo]

Bet Thommy boy deletes that comment again. Couldn't resist could you? I didn't continue this... I wouldn't have come back to this thread without Thommy Boy's little boy hit and run name calling bullshit. Oh name call and then delete the comment he he... you're a coward Thommy boy.

[Thomas W Case]

You are a troll....not any type of serious writer, go back under the bridge....calling me a crybaby? I didn't hit and run....I'm right here....why do you f**k with people....you must be bored, like most stupid people....why don't you try to write something with substance?

[Thomas W Case]

You are hysterical and you are the coward...I deleted my comment....my comment....cuz I was trying to be nice. the comment directed to you...Are you sniffing glue you idiot?

[Thomas W Case]

Davidgeo… you’re a clown playing at conversation. Empty insults, zero craft, zero spine. Go write something that matters—or crawl back under the bridge where the trolls belong. This isn’t high school, it’s real life, and you’re failing spectacularly.

[ETERNITY]

Thomas, No! Don't delete your comments! You have a way with words. Everybody knows Davidgeo. Sniffing glue...that's a good one! Lols!

[Davidgeo]

Okay. Why are you talking to me at all then? I didn't instigate this conversation between us Thommy boy. You did. Then tried to weasel away by deleting your post, this is on you buddy... you did this. Now f**k off or keep going, I don't mind either way.

[Thomas W Case]

You call this ‘high school bullshit’ while acting like the loudest kid in detention. Grow up, write better, or disappear quietly.

[Thomas W Case]

You confuse sarcasm with cruelty and volume with intelligence. That’s not edge—that’s emptiness flailing. Come back when you’ve written something that survives daylight.

[Thomas W Case]

You’re trying to rewrite history to make yourself look clean. You’re not. You attacked people. I defended them. That’s it. Don’t come back.

[Davidgeo]

I'm not trying to look clean. I'm pointing out the fact that YOU interacted with me. I don't want anything to do with you, not then, not now. But you continue, because your little boy feelings are hurt over getting called out in your cowardly hit and run name calling bs. I at least leave it up, you, f**k people like you.

[Davidgeo]

Now are you done Thommy boy? Do we have to keep going? Are you still all up in your feels Thommy?

[Thomas W Case]

You’re confused, so I’ll clarify once—then I’m done.
You went after younger writers. I spoke up. That’s the beginning and the end of it.

I didn’t “hit and run.” I disengaged because the thread wasn’t about me. You chose to keep dragging it back because conflict is clearly your oxygen.

I’m not hurt. I’m not emotional. I’m finished.
You can keep arguing with yourself if you want—but I won’t be part of it anymore.

This ends here.

[Davidgeo]

Yeah right. Ha. Nice try. Don't do that s**t again.

[ETERNITY]

OMG Davidgeo, SO forceful and such a capital M-A-N.

[Davidgeo]

The rage baiting is painfully obvious. You need to grow up. Crybabying over such a stupid thing... "rhyming is for p*****s"... that doesn't sound like I'm sarcastically agreeing with this dude's poem? No? Goin' straight to assuming insult? You people are insane. And to drag it out like this? It's either rage baiting or just plain dumb assery. Either way, it's really stupid.

[Thomas W Case]

I have to agree with you on this point of agreeing with him....I jumped the gun...I apologize to you for that...I was wrong, and I need to thank you...brilliant fodder for writing....too much rhyme and tick tock meter makes poems sound like nursery rhymes. Your bluntness caught me off guard.....once bitten twice shy to use an old tired cliche.

[ETERNITY]

I was being SARCASTIC.

[Thomas W Case]

lol...you are great. and extremely funny. Wise beyond your years.

[ETERNITY]

Thomas, devious like a real woman eh? I planned way back when Davidgeo said we didn't recognize "sarcasm". Thank you, sir ;)

[Thomas W Case]

lol...you are fantastic!!!

[Davidgeo]

Totally believable.

[Scorpious Alpha]

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[Davidgeo]

Hey Thommy, I have to ask before I accept your "apology"... what was your end game here? To shame and bully me off the site? I want you to understand who the bully is here. I want you to understand that I'm not going to run from this stupid pretentious virtue signalling bully clique you and a few others here are a part of. yeah, I accept your "apology"... but do understand - I know what you were trying to do. I know what you people are really like inside, even if you yourselves do not.

[ETERNITY]

SCORPIOUS Alpha, I agree totally with Thomas. Your write is gutsy, baring your soul and your feeling as if you suck as a poet. All poetry does not rhyme. Some of the best does not rhyme. I love your ability to show your heart.

[Davidgeo]

He doesn't really suck you know. I think he might have been, writing sarcastically or something? I don't know. F**k you.

[ETERNITY]

What about THIS BEAUTY?
Love Is A Lie
A Poem by Scorpious Alpha

Love is a lie, a neurochemical con job
It seems to happen to any old slob
It's a drug that destroys the heart
Once it's torn away from you, you're left torn apart
Love does exist unconditionally
But fades away romantically
I've loved too much and am left broken
Because I poured my heart out into words I've spoken
To those in which I gave myself
That left me in my own private hell
Because of this, my love is dead
And so it goes to family and friends instead
I have yet to find my one true love
Not sure she exists, just see above
It's the only thing I've ever wanted out of life
Instead, I've been stabbed in the heart with a knife
Old fashioned love has long been dead
And only exists inside our head
Movies and tv, books and the like
Have happy endings and never show the spike
That gets driven into your heart eventually
Because that's always the harsh reality
Love fades as time goes on
Because like I said, it's just a con

[Thomas W Case]

We have probably all had those thoughts. I know I have.

[Davidgeo]

Rhyming is for p*****s anyway

[ETERNITY]

Davidgeo, you are wrong. Is THIS a p***y?
"Aqualung"

Sitting on the park bench
Eyeing little girls with bad intent.
Snot is running down his nose
Greasy fingers smearing shabby clothes.

Hey Aqualung
Drying in the cold sun
Watching as the frilly panties run.
Hey Aqualung
Feeling like a dead duck
Spitting out pieces of his broken luck.
Whoa, Aqualung

Sun streaking cold
An old man wandering lonely.
Taking time
The only way he knows.
Leg hurting bad,
As he bends to pick a dog-end
He goes down to the bog
And warms his feet.

Feeling alone
The army's up the road
Salvation à la mode and a cup of tea

Aqualung my friend
Don't you start away uneasy
You poor old sot, you see, it's only me.

Do you still remember
The December's foggy freeze
When the ice that
Clings on to your beard was
Screaming agony.
And you snatch your rattling last breaths
With deep-sea-diver sounds,
And the flowers bloom like
Madness in the spring.

Sun streaking cold
An old man wandering lonely.
Taking time
The only way he knows.
Leg hurting bad,
As he bends to pick a dog-end
He goes down to the bog
And warms his feet.

Feeling alone
The army's up the road
Salvation à la mode and a cup of tea

Aqualung my friend
Don't you start away uneasy
You poor old sot, you see, it's only me.

Aqualung my friend
Don't you start away uneasy
You poor old sot, you see, it's only me.

Sitting on the park bench
Eyeing little girls with bad intent.
Snot is running down his nose
Greasy fingers smearing shabby clothes.

Hey Aqualung
Drying in the cold sun
Watching as the frilly panties run.
Hey Aqualung
Feeling like a dead duck
Spitting out pieces of his broken luck.
Hey Aqualung

Whoa, Aqualung

[Scorpious Alpha]

@davidgeo tell that to every musician ever

[Davidgeo]

Jeus f*****g christ you people are insufferable. Obviously I was being sarcastic. Ugh. What is wrong you two? Get a grip.