So Lean

spiritually eviscerated, I gain no sustenance...


So lean
Soul verge on the emasculate
So mean
Self-deception so immaculate


Always made do
With the barely runnin’
Took a gentle touch
To keep the motor hummin’
Spanned the void
In the barely runnin’
Just a tender touch
Kept the whole thing hummin’


Lost my
Soul to
Lust and speed
Lost my
Soul too
Lost indeed

Lost in
what you think
you want you need


When I picked it up
It was hardly workin'
But I kept it up
I was always workin'
I tried to fix’er
but it wasn’t broken
I tried to fix her
but it wouldn’t work for me


I did what I f****n' do
with the barely runnin'
I spanned the f****n' void
In the barely runnin'


Don’t hate all women
Just a chosen few
Adore the virgin
Avoid the shrew
Given time I’d draw a line
Between the good and bad
To sit and rhyme for now is fine
An’ recall the had and should


Release me wicked vampiress
Injection site infection
Defenses’ now are unimpressed
Rejection by reflection


Still working on this one...
screamin'ian2009

Author's Note

Drug this one up 'cos it's currently pertinent in my life.

Reviews

[Little Birdie]

"Lost my
Soul to
Lust and speed
Lost my
Soul too
Lost indeed

Lost in
what you think
you want you need "

That's just perfect. I really love your poems for they have a slow, mellow, drawn out rhythm, makes them easy to relate to and let the emotions sink in.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Very aggressive and spoken in way that causes the pulse to rise as if the reader was the target. Being able to touch someone through your words bringing out emotions whether positive or negative is always impressive. Great poem..

[MsMermaid]

Yes, this work in progress has great potential. Angry as it is it still has a lot of merit. You'll be able to pull the thoughts together, make them a more concise rant for all to enjoy and rant along with you.

[screamin'ian]

It's an angry song... Pretty concrete. Nothing to "decipher," just straightforward runnin' down the road in a barely runnin', needs fixin', bloodsucker.

[bookworm]

I think perhaps it helps to go of those things in which we are powerless over. Your anger seems to be overpowering your voice and it makes it difficult to decipher any clear thoughts. You may need to revisit this one further down the road, when you've had a chance to heal a bit.