My Brother Lost

This has not happened and I pray that it does not but this is what came to me and I fear it may come to be. I morn him even now as I type these words to screen, for I have known in him a love

It's raining cats and logs, the dogs have stayed in to sleep

They make not a peep as thunder shakes the streets

 

The torrents flood the city, while quietly darkness waits

Lighting brings to bare the heavy burden of the heart

The mind a terrible waist in a storm of doors and gates

Where one trap closes, another slowly tares him apart

 

Stirred by ill intent, the snoring suddenly stops

Thunder silenced still, it echoes and it pops

 

Crippling manic thoughts, drift in under battered broken door

Suicide the last resort, of a man who's at the frayed end of his rope

One more enemy made, where only two had stood before

Each in their own time, have played a tune he couldn't cope

 

The dogs have died, the cats have all but ran away

Logs have sown trees of doubt, there in the middle of the fray

 

He took his life and left behind four gems of purest light

Of the three who used to be, only one remained to cry

They wept for him in darkest hour, afraid in bleakest night 

He left this coil to return to ash and oil, his thunder stolen dry

 

And though he is not gone, I would cry for my brother lost.

 

 

 

    

Author's Note

This has not happened and I pray that it does not but this is what came to me and I fear it may come to be. I morn him even now as I type these words to screen, for I have known in him a love of a brother, born not from my mother or father, but a brother all the same. I love you Chuck

Reviews

[Ruth]

One of the most painful things is to observe someone's downfall that we care about, and yet, we forget whether it is our choice to save them or not...life can be painful, sending hugs and positive light x

[realmwriter]

Thank you Poppy. I can feel your hugs and positive light with each word I read here. I just hope that my friend can feel it too.

[Ruth]

Welcome hon, here for you, should you need a friend x

[realmwriter]

I have many friends and it never Hurts to have another. Thank you Poppy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes we see friends on a certain path...and we are helpless to stop them, they have to do it themselves...and it may seem as if that is not going to happen...

you capture that feeling of watching another self-destruct.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. I was writing it while I was on the phone with him.

[Rowan Storm]

It's dark, and very partial to a memory. Whether it be real or imagined, which you said it hasn't happened. It carries the emotion and it's well written. There are a few spelling errors though.

[realmwriter]

Would be so kind please to point out the spelling errors?

[realmwriter]

and thank you for the review.

[Rowan Storm]

Lighting or lightning? waist or waste? tares or tears?

[realmwriter]

Sometimes, our friends are like true family. Me as a lonely child after my brother died, know this, I've lot's of brothers and sister friends, who I see as real family and the fear of losing them, can create real visions, at times. I don't know how this sweet brother of yours "Chuck" is in real life, but it seems, your fear has a road of it's own, and it is almost like you feel strongly this is going to happen, that it almost in mind happend already, (I'm familiar with this feeling) it's created out of our most high sensitive feelers. (not always though it is going to happen). But good you write of this... I know you're a poet that feels things to the bones, as we talked before, don't keep all inside your heart, let it out. Well written, and very recognizable for me. I think, you are strong, for death and life in your visions are one. They just belong to each other. Thank you D.

- Elisa

[realmwriter]

It is I who am thankful. Thank you for your thoughtful touching review. Actually kinda hit the nail right on the head here too. I was talkin to Chuck on facebook messenger as he was relating to me how he felt like ending it all and I had the great since that, after it had been sometime since his last message, that he did. This piece is a result of that. As he had explained to me in the morning that he had simply dozed off. But it was incredibly scary for me thinking that I had just lost a brother. Thank you again Elisa.

Thank you, truly for explaining that to me, and I've been through a similar situation with someone I loved deeply like a soul-kin... mostly psychologically seen, when they talk about it, it will never happen, how paradoxal that may sound, those who are silent, are to watch out for more, their minds are more lost... (not always ofc. but statistically seen). I hope that comfort your thoughts and fear a bit... Keep on being there for him, he could use you now more than ever. You are welcome D. ((HUGS)).