Something different challange.

The underlined portion is what I wrote.

But for what reason should I have to submerge myself into vulnerability - you - when alone I can turn starry nights into dying lights and summon thunderstorms with the snap of my fingers?

I simply lust for company; although you only impair my vision with fractions of beauty and disaster, and I am left unable to distinguish one from the other, I am comfortable in living beyond the boundaries of norm. Held captive by an angel who basks in flesh, my flesh rots in eternal paradise.

And yet - I can no longer suppress the urge to set sail into your being, there is a fatal attraction here. I see tidal waves and lightning bolts, and blood in the water.. your beauty is disaster, and I am lost in it.

 

 

I cherish your tumultuous seas and I find myself lost in the breeze, in the froth of displeasure I am left to measure what I have done as a man. I can no longer wallow in the forgotten and be dashed on the rocks of despair. But I find you so captivating. The way your Nile River hair flows as the wind blows it to and fro. As a ship at sea, caught in a wave it flows across my mind. With eyes as bright as the sun, I am lost to eternity in the vastness of their depth.

Reviews

[Jordan]

Yes! I love it. Glad you could add to the 'ship at sea' theme I had running.

[realmwriter]

It was an intriguing start. I love the sea and sailing. Thanx man.

[Rene Salinas]

It seems that interpretation and a bit of modernizing took place. The first seems to be a confession from a divinity asking why should it become mortal. But for the feeling of company that it confesses and to feel and seek that company in the presence of the ocenas and its being. Maybe poseidon.....
The interpretation more accepting of the mortal vestiges I think, but still deeply immersed and imbued with the presence in this case of a female entity.

Intriguing writing.

Thankyou

[realmwriter]

Only the underlined is what I wrote.