Prickling Pulsing Fingers of Death

Into fear personified
Where that of nightmares hide

 

Turn and flee from flickering light
Turn and flee into heavy night

 

Stalking ever closer still
Find your scream caught in shrill

 

Footsteps loom at prickling back
Turning fear to a different tack

 

Pangs of torture cripple inside
Cringing in search of a place to hide

 

Born of shadows, inky figures rise
To feast on tears, a soul to prize

 

Hatchets raised to honor the slaughter

A wide arc swings to fool the fodder

 

Terrified you flea in panic

Stricken by guilt, imagining havoc

 

Awful horrors fill the shadows in kind

Running from the sanity your leaving behind

 

Sinking from the corners closest to you

Chink.. Chink.. Chink... what can you do

 

Chink... Chink... Chink... 

A scream caught in the back of your throat

 

Chink... Chink... Chink...

You begin to feel the terror lost in a mote

 

Shik... Shik... Shik...

A dragging and rattling of heavy chains

 

Shik... Shik... Shik...

You feel ice raising through prickling veins

 

Successive contractions of the heart throb in your ears

A sent of sulphur wafting slowly through your fears

 

Breathing heavily you try in vain to run

Oh but the shadows are having so much fun

 

Icy cold mists of brittle blusterous breath

You feel the prickling pulsing fingers of death

 

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

isn't this a spine-tingling, chilly write that makes that fear bubble up inside up into your throat just waiting to be set free.... love the last line and cleverly penned as the title.. loved the way you teased the senses and mind with the imagery...

one thing noticed...

"Running from the sanity your leaving behind"... did you mean "you're?"....

well done Derick.. I am a scaredy cat and this one sure gave me a spook!... wheeew!..

[realmwriter]

Yes I did mean you're I forgot to fix that. Dang procrastination. I'm very happy that you like this. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing it.

[Ruth]

I felt out of breath reading this lol The pace kept me captivated and the chill lingers :) xo

[realmwriter]

Thank you so much Poppy. You are awesome. Happy you liked it. Breathless, Big Smile.

[R Smith]

that was straight in my library, fast, furious, flowing like wine, imaginative and creative, i'm not sure i have enough words of praise but i do know i love it, so thank you :)

[realmwriter]

No sir. Thank You. I appreciate the compliments. You need say nothing more. It is an honor.

[R Smith]

your always welcome my friend

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A quick flowing and highly inspired piece that relates perfectly, well done.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. Glad that you like it.

[MomzillaNC]

Ooo-oo-oooo! This one sent chills shuddering up my spine. When I read aloud, the "chink… chink… chink…" and the "shik… shik… shik…" I could almost hear those metallic sounds!

[realmwriter]

Thank you so very much Momzilla, I am very glad that you liked it and that you could almost feel it.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Colton Warr]

I loved this piece! An absolutely great job here, this poem told a story, created fear, made me feel the horror. Writing out the actual noises was brilliant. It gave me a visual and made me feel as if I was the one running and hiding. Love it, thanks for writing!

[realmwriter]

Then I definitely did what any writer wishes to do. I put you (the reader) within the piece and in so doing you saw it from a different point of view. And the whole of it isn't fear of an external locus, rather a fear of self. You nailed it. Thank you so very much for this wonderful review. I am flabbergasted.

[charles_duane]

I very much enjoyed this piece, it has an eerie Edgar Allen Poe style and feel to it. Great Job!

[realmwriter]

Edgar Allen Poe is by far my favorite of story tellers, even more so Than the greatest bard of them all Shakespeare. Thank you very much, for that HUGE compliment. I truly appreciate it.

[charles_duane]

No problem man. Edgar is my favorite as well.

[justaishaaa]

This is eerily creepy but it's awesome! I like the use of sound and it literally feels like I am feeling everything in here! Wow, love it.

[realmwriter]

Thank You very much. Glad you like it. Inspired by Momzillas "Something Wicked Stalks the Light"

[justaishaaa]

I will read that, your most welcome!

[Briana O'Connor]

Very creepy! I like the flow and pace. It really adds to the power of the theme. Well penned.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. It was inspired by Momzillas "Something Wicked Stalk the Light"
I'm very glad that you like it.