Gilded Moonlit Hour

If you the moon, guard the night, then guard my home with all your might

Stay the shadows from the corners and the devils of their fright

 

If you the moon, light the way, then light my path this darkened day

Stay the tides that wash the gloom and the hush that speaks the fray

 

If you this night grow wise and bright, then share with me your cognition

Stymie the howl of the beast within and silence the cries of contrition 

 

If you the dark and sorrowless shadow call, then call me into your bower

Stymie the fear of stumbling numb, this long and drearily desolate hour

Reviews

[TheLostMind]

I think this is your best poem so far... Good job..

[realmwriter]

Thank you so very much, I truly appreciate it and I am happy that you like it.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Simply amazing. Your talent has grown immensely since I last read you.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much Neva. I am very happy that you lie it.

[Bright Ocean Star]

This great poem reminds me of being a child and having to go out back to my dad's shed in the dark of night to fetch something. I hated the darkness, but if the moon was full and projected it's wattage strong enough, it would illuminate the shed well enough for me to feel significantly better. Great writing, RW!

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. Happy to know that it brought such a vivid memory, even if it isn't entirely the best one. I have always found the moon to be rather comforting.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Yes. Always. Moonlight keeps vampires away as well..:)

[realmwriter]

Now wait, how does that work?

[Bright Ocean Star]

Vampires don't like the light, apparently. There was a really good movie made recently about this with Hugh Jackman playing the vampire hunter. Very good movie!

[realmwriter]

Yeah I've seen that movie, pretty good I thought. Can't think of the name of it though.

[Jack Wolfe]

I liked this. It gave me two different impressions; one being afraid of the dark and all it entails, praying for the moon to illuminate the world and wash away the shadows. The second impression is of someone who fears who they become at night, murderer, fiend, or beast suffering from lycanthropy. The poem was fluided and read with ease until the break in rhythm between 'wisdom and coward' but that could be me,

[realmwriter]

Thank you for pointing out that break in the rhyme, I hadn't noticed, as it was late in the hour when I wrote it. I changed the last two words of the mentioned stanza. Seems to work much better. I am happy that you like it and I thank you very much for your great review.

[Jack Wolfe]

This reads a lot smoother. I would recommend turning down your font as it jumps at you. I read this last night while on the phone so the font was condensed, just a suggestion.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. Glad to see that it does read a lot smoother. I think I will adjust the font down at least by one.