Pain Beseeched

 

When clouds fade away revealing beautiful day. A tone is set for us take the way. When eyes are bleeding from the fleeting. A tempo is reached for those beseech and those traveling weary on there way. When tears have groan to fill the heart and years have gone by to cover the pain of self regret. Are there none here whom cant see the evil we create. When mournful crys turn to tormented lullabies and the harbinger stands ready at your door. Do you finally see the pain Ive shown for all these years before.Theres nothing left but to confess the pain I feel each day. When I see my self and know that I cant get away. After all the tears and all the years, after all the clouded jaded judgment passed I still feel the pain so vast. As the knife cuts away the eyes that see this torment and the heart that feels this hate, theres nothing that can be done to make this pain abate.

Just guess when this was penned. Thats right 05

Dec 18, 2010

Author's Note

please critique

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is cool. Very offbeat, but the word choice and rhythm are excellent. Granted this is raw and unpolished, it's excellent. Nice work.

[Yina]

I'm terrible at crriticizing so I'm not even gonna try:) You did good with expressing the pain in this write. I think I'm gonna start writing in paragraph form to....

[Ripple of Aqua]

So smooth the way it's written

[IceDragonOfPluto]

love the prose poem style. it conveys emotions very well and you have done a good job doing that.