As She Lay Down To Sleep

Poetic response to Shae-Leigh Johns' as I lay me down to sleep

As she lay down to sleep

She prayed the Lord her soul to keep

Her torment grew

Fear made her weak

Cold steel at her temple

A plea for release from her lips

Desperate cry to God was heard

He stayed her hand and opened her heart

Pain diminished, the chains dropped

The Lord breathed life into her precious soul

Reviews

[Anjali]

Wow...this is really heart stirring! I really liked this piece. The theme is really good as well! Such a beautiful poem!

[Lynaelee]

I love the pictures you paint. The Lord is willing to give, we just have to have the courage to ask. Crazy concept, but He's a Father that truly wants the best for His children: us. Well done, hun!

[Tbear]

Thank you so much.. this was incited from another poets piece.. one that was more dismal.. I longed to show that God stays the hand if only the person let him..

[Lynaelee]

It's a hard concept to wrap our mind around in this instantly-gratifying-world. No time like the present to show His love, compassion, mercy, and grace

[Najam Us Saher]

This is a very heart touching and encouraging poem. Loved it.

[Surya]

Well, emotions just came here as words with your words....
Thank you for sharing..:)

[Tbear]

Awww :) I shall be reading more of you too Surya.. let us see what emotions are stirred... write on..

[Manu]

This is a beautifully written poem filled with deep emotions. Very nicely worded.
Despair has been turned into hope. Ends on an optimistic note.
I love the message in this.
A very good response indeed to the poem:
'as I lay me down to sleep by Shae-Leigh Johns'

[Tbear]

Thank you so much for the review.. off to read your works..

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This is very deep. Go under my skin words like burn and let me think . Can i ever wrote poem like this.

[Tbear]

I believe you will be able to Martin, you just keep on feeling, living, loving and writing..build the vocabulary and try lots of different styles :)

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yes that s what i am doing. if you go all over my poems. you will see diffirent styles and themes .

[Jane de Deus]

Though I know very little about what is behind this agony, the imagery conjures the build up and salvation that I think you were aiming for.

[Tbear]

This was a response to
'as I lay me down to sleep
A Poem by Shae-Leigh Johns'

"now I lay me down to sleep,
I pray the Lord my soul to keep,
and if I die before I wake,
I pray my soul the lord to take"

the pillow muffles her cries
the darkness hides her pain
she knows she at the edge
she knows she's at the end

she begs and pleads with her mind
to break these chains and break this pain
she's scared and alone
she's shaken and breaking

all she wants is to fly
all she wants is to die
she's sick of crying
and she tired of trying

this is the end
for her and as she puts the gun to her head
she ask the lord to take her soul

I hoped my response would convey that there is hope for those who are at the end of their tether