Father You Are...

Describing Father

Father you are stone
Solid, granite
A place
To let troubles free

 

I am planet
You are moon
Always watching
When in sky, I cannot see

 

You are strength
Of pillar
Always standing
When I must lean

 

A push, a shove
Love tough
When you know
It's what I need

 

Arms as iron fence
Surrounding
The whole
Of family

 

Bound you and I
Tight upon one heart
And on, God's honor set
As to you, a father I hope to be

Reviews

[Madalyn Beck]

This is beautiful. The metaphor usage is brilliant. I have to say, fathers are spectacular. Great write! :)

[Michael G. Smith]

I tried to come up with a different style on this one. Less descriptive and comparison objects to my father or all fathers.

[Laura Harrison]

A wonderful and heartfelt piece. I especially loved the use of metaphors.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you Flame.

[A. Amos]

Great metaphors simply amazing piece thanks for sharing

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Amos, I had a stern military father but he always made me feel loved.

[A. Amos]

That's great

[s y e]

Wow, there are some really amazing metaphors in this write Mike - The wording is beautiful, this is an amazing write. I loved the ending too, very powerful.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, tried to find short simple words to best describe father's.

[s y e]

It's perfect.

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely book end to your poem about your mother. Some great metaphors.

[Michael G. Smith]

I envy all who have them.

[rutherford]

MG, what a beautiful expression of what fathers aspire to be. Especially liked the analogies of planet and moon and the iron fence. Wonderful work.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, the Lord knew what he was doing when he created the family structure.

[Rita L. Sev]

You are strength
Of pillar
Always standing
When I must lean

I especially like this image - that is certainly what my father was to me... Well penned, Mike!

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you again. Anticipating The baby breached.

[Avinash]

My association with my father was for 13 yrs. And those were the most formative years in my life. Post that it was wilderness and getting lost in the chaos. So every word of yours I can deeply identify by missing them in my life when I probably needed most.
A good father passes you on everything he learnt from life. And that is the best inheritance and strongest protection you can think of.

[Michael G. Smith]

So very true.

[shallimarRose]

Nice word usage and tribute to father. thank you for the rr. Rose

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Good metaphors! And you ended the piece dramatically, sweetly. Your father is blessed to have you. :x