A Leprechauns Trick

A St. Patrick's Day poem!

 

Dancing around in marshes below

leprechauns party spreading lots of joy

a fellow follows the sound of the lot

hoping to his heart,

to be blessed with a pot o’ gold

spotting the path up ahead the fellow

holds his head up high

ready to emerge into the sky

a rainbow pathway leads upward

guiding the fellow into the icy air

 up above the green countryside

running over the rainbow

something catches his eye

a pot o’ gold in a patch of clovers below

jumping off the path above

the poor fellow crunches to the valley floor

a mere leprechaun trick,

for a St. Patrick’s Day fool

Author's Note

I took me awhile to write this poem, and all comments are appreciated, soif your have advice or somthing to say spill it out. Thanks

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

This was a great St. Patty's day Piece! i loved the whimsical tale of the hunt for fools gold. I think you told this tale really well in your flow and word choices.

The only thing I would say is the 3rd line from the bottom jerks the flow alittle....
"the poor fellow crunches to (?) valley floor"
? - Maybe a "the" or "a" inserted would make it flow perfect.

Other then that. It was a fun piece of Ink!
Keep up the good work Dana!

Aaron Maycroft

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your winning poem.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the St. Paddy's Day contest!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

The Irish are special people who deserve their day! I like your poem.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Great St. Paddy's Day poem. Loved it.

[Wildecat]

Those Leprechaun's are pretty tricky indeed, enjoyed your poem, will be reading more of your work.

[Fran Marie]

You have to watch out for those tricky lil' leprechauns indeed,
a delightful write and enjoyable read so very well crafted~

THanks for sharing it in the St. PaDDy Pot O' Gold Contest

Fran Marie

[Lair Noir]

Witty and a joy to read, very nice work.
Some nice little phrases in there, 'pot o' gold' etc, encouraging you to read it in an Irish accent. Well, I did anyway, heh.
Keep up the good work, I shall read some more of your poetry you can be sure of that.

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, a delightful, and fun St. Patrick's Day write!!
Most enjoyable for the wearing of the green!