opening up

a re-written peice

 Opening up

I've got this hole in my chest

Everything I found is pumping out

And you’re not helping me here

I’m torn inside with misery and regret

And all you do is clench so hard

Your nails biting deep into my heart

Trying to write down my feelings

When I’m unsure of what I’m feeling

But who gave a damn what mattered to me

Anyways

 

Everything I know is flowing from me

And you’re not helping

Tears fall to my cheek

My dreams sift through clenched fists

Everything I know is flowing from me

And you’re not helping me

 

Time and time again

I have fallen deep inside myself

I let go of everything

Holding nothing at all

Is better than letting it fall

If I could say it just once

Just to make it real

Would you stay?

Would you believe in me?

 

Everything I know is flowing from me

And you’re not helping

Tears fall to my cheek

My dreams sift through clenched fists

Everything I know is flowing from me

And you’re not helping me

 

I've got this hole in my chest

Everything I found is pumping out

As I open it up

You were there holding me

As I screamed about being alone

I pushed you away

And all I know is flowing from me

I let it fall away...

Reviews

[Aimee]

Great poem,
I really like the last two stanzas.
Deep.

[:

[Emily?]

I really can relate to this poem. It is such a great write, I love it soo much! Great Job!=)

[ebur™]

this was a great piece, obviously. I liked the emotion flowing through, a bit of anger, a bit of sorrow. Also, I liked how you incorporated the line 'and you're not helping me' (along with other lines too) again and again throughout the whole poem. It added emphasis. Overall well-done! :)