What If

pov: two lovers standing at the edge of a tower, sharing a sunset, exchanging looks that speaks volumes without words

We stood up high, looked down.
Said, "What if?" locked eyes, no sound.
Just held hands, at the edge.
Felt the drop, beneath our feet.
Didn't jump, just thought we might.
Shared a scare, in dying light.

Reviews

[Buddhistboy73]

Hey Seren

An interesting poem...the thought of "what if"...
You can almost imagine this as a mini screen shot....with two actors in a scene from a movie..

I liked the final line....shared a scare, in dying light

BB73

[Seren]

Thank you for your kind review!
This poem was actually inspired by a sight of a young couple standing at the edge of a tower.
It felt like a movie scene indeed!

[Vol]

Seren,
A couple enjoying a concentrated experience of love, distilled to it's essence, is fraught with the fear that we might lose, might fail, might even disappoint, so we hold to what ever anchor we can find... A delicious way to live.
Vol

[Seren]

A profound observation! Your words capture the bittersweet essence of love – its beauty, vulnerability, and depth.

Thank you for your kind review! Vol

[emmajoygreen]

Love is apt to add some fear to its hearth if only to add some danger for both people to pause, think and wonder. Perhaps? That pause at the very moment when you might fall into a situation with another person and what might be the outcome. Some would walk away BUT others would consider that it is better to have loved than.. never to have loved at all..

A poem that invites thought and.. yet more thought, seren.

[Seren]

Beautifully said!
Love's complexity is woven with threads of fear and uncertainty, but it's often the risk that makes it worthwhile.
Thank you for your kind review dear emma :)

[emmajoygreen]

Re-reading after your mai.l.. which I've absorbed and attended to. Lyrics and singer now acknowledged.

Hope you'll return and lay some more words when you can. Until. you need look after yourself, yes?

[Seren]

Very content to see your message emma!
Yes, I've been taking good care and i hope are you too!
Hugs and smiles always :)

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Woahhh. Well thats powerful... I have no idea why but this reminded me Life Is Strange game. There was a cliff in that game, and storms... maybe for that. But this poem is wayyy powerful even in such less words.

[Seren]

I wish i could understand the game reference but sadly i haven't heard of that particular game before
However, I'm very much glad and thankful that this poem was able to evoke such strong emotions within you :)