Walking Through My Dreams

walking down the path

of a thin winding road
deep breaths
honeysuckle & jasmine
adhere to the senses
........I feel
prisms of color
fluctuate
from bent angles
mirrored
........I see
reaching out
grasping
to hold on
........I touch
cotton muslin flows
as if the breeze could inspire
like a tented soul
encapsulated
........I hide
as if these next few moments
could make a difference
between two worlds
walking up hill
against the wind
I sink into the soft sands
of your warm embrace
I know
they will not
and still
you go walking through my dreams

© 2010 bj smith

aka shallimar

Author's Note

Feel free to comment and critique..

Reviews

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow you added physics/emotions/love and many more things to this poetry. Bravo *thumbsup*
this picture reminds me of two people loving each other under rain - Caught in rain.. my poetry :D
Well Rose nicely penned and I really enjoyed it :)
Great expressions throughout :)
Left me thinking "You go walking through my dreams"

- Singh :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you , I kind of thought you would enjoy this one.. xo Rose

[Veronica Chandler]

Such an incredible play of lightness and struggle, restraint and surrender, like the perfect little recipe for a light, breezy dream from which you wake up in a cold sweat. A perfect, delicious and sweet cheese cake dessert which can be devoured guilt free. Yummy and delightful! I feel a vibe like a wispy jazz number with a really cool chick singing on stage along with a stand up base and saxophone. An inspired write!

[shallimarRose]

Wow, I love this comment...... Yes I felt inspired here.. like the light breeze blowing the sheer curtain or the sunshine forming prisms of color on the windowpane. Hiding under the covers and hoping the dream never ends. Thank you for the wonderful comment.. shallimarRose

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Shallimar,
Hauntingly beautiful, Words that float and wind into my soul, so delicate and fragile are your thoughts and words
"I sink into the soft sands
of your warm embrace I know they will not and still...
you go walking through my dreams"

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Anne... this is one of my favorites.... Im glad you could feel the haunting of the dream.. sR

[anne p. murray- LadeeAnne]

Yes...very much so

[Allyson Wolfe]

The imagery used is nice! I love the idea of walking through another's dreams. Good work!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Allison.. I have been off for quite awhile.. shallimar

[Brandon S. Whitten]

A beautiful piece you have written. Loved the imagery, the flow...spirit is happy

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Brandon.. I am pretty new to this site as far as posting and subscribing... Im still trying to figure it all out.. xo shallimar

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Yw and welcome to Writers Cafe. Thank you for pulling up a chair and reading my work. Have a wonderful day:)

[sharonlee]

Haunting sentiments Shallimar ... delicatly crafted.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sharonlee.. Good to see you here..