Quintessennce

sensual undertones in this one.

 Quintessence

he held her in his arms tightly

in ambivalence

ambiguous notes being played

silently in the darkened night skies

permeating inward souls

past appetencies

dissipating in the warmth

of this pervade hunger

the amorous thrusts

quite quintessential

emotionally cleaved

as the moonlight waned

in the distance

giving way to the recompense

of a new day

with indemnification clauses

vaguely enforced

© 2010 bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Author's Note

critique welcome
photo from google images..

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

had to put on my thinking cap and read slowly to taste all the nuance. love your use of language. contrasts and tension to resolution with a touch of humor. hypothetically quintessence is said to have gone repulsive 10 billion years ago...before that; it is said to have been able to go both ways...fascinating. i enjoyed your poem very much and appreciate the wordage...:)
E.

[shallimarRose]

lol well I am glad you had to think about it.. If you would had got it right off the bat I would have felt really inferior lol... I wrote this back on Myspace. Thank you for reading.. xo

[Einstein Noodle]

love it! :)

[Miss Marlette]

Made me think...of the new day and what it would bring in its wake. Hot, captivating and sexy read. Thanks.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you pen for reading.. shallimarRose

[Miss Marlette]

You are welcome :)

[Frieda P]

I don't know if I'm hungry or horny now...ha, sassy one shallimar. It's not direct but it's effective, you work up to the finale, and it's a hot entree.

[shallimarRose]

I think you kind of got this one huh? It's that indemnity clause lol
Sometimes we just don't see or care about the consequences to an action.. thanks for reading.. xo

[Frieda P]

Been there, done that...sorry to say, ha...my pleasure shallimar :-) x

[shallimarRose]

Well I am sure most have at one time or another.. Especially in younger days... xo

[Frieda P]

Yep those were the days......................

[RainDancer1997]

This poem made me really think, and that's a good thing:) It made me really pay attention to what was being said:) good job!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rainy.. I am going to confess that I actually had to do some thinking to come up with this one.. lol xo

[RainDancer1997]

Well I can defiantly tell you took your time to carefully write it:)

[Keith]

I love these mysterious ones, I think this was a most beautiful way of saying that he just wanted to get her in the sack.

[shallimarRose]

lol Yesssss I think your right.. Thanks for reading..

[Keith]

Well, you actually said so much more with so few words, as only you can do.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Keith again.. xo

[Jack...]

Each day provides new opportunities for us to show our love, it is how we make use of these days that paints the portrait of who we are and who we love. Very nice my cute friend.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Jack... Looking forward to trying this with you... (writing I mean) huggs, Rose

[Clara]

This was my favourite part:

"dissipating in the warmth
of this pervade hunger
the amorous thrusts
quite quintessential
emotionally cleaved"

A very sensual poem.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Lola for reading.. Not everyone gets this one.. I am glad you came by to read and review.. shallimarRose

[B-poet]

Very well written. A profound & romantic message in the making. If you want a lover to keep coming back for more then each love session should always be quintessential. Great work Rose, a riveting read. :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Brian.. I love it when you read here.. :) Rose

[Pete Langley]

I could easily be wrong, but this sounded like it was nice while it lasted, but.....past "appetensies" threw me - I could only think of maybe `past .sweet times` ? ...and did `indemnification clauses` mean you gave him your mother`s number? Sensuous verbosity! ....that's a new one, Rose! P.

[shallimarRose]

Well no lol.. Actually the past appentences or past desires disappear in the presence of his hunger for her.. The "indemnification clauses vaguely enforced" here is meant to show there would be a lack or failure to take responsibility afterwards as it would apply here to a relationship. Is it clear as mud now.. I hope I got that right.. lol huggs, Rose

[Tai Ryens]

I am enticed by the whole poem . . .

[shallimarRose]

Thank you very much Tai... its a bit out of my norm... shallimar