Plausible

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Plausible ....

Was it you?

…........Was it me?

When did we stop

…........When did we give up?

Stop trying?

You still sit in the garden of dreams

Throwing coins in the pool of probable cause

Sipping self pity cocktails

and eating regret baguettes

….......blaming me?

It's your boots on the wrong side of the door

All you had to do was open it...

bj smith

aka shallimaRose

Author's Note

Thoughts, comments welcome.. sR

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

intriguing title ... love this style of writing .. i see him as an idiot (as we men are so much of the time) should have seen the plausibility of staying and making it better ... he's the looser ShallimarRose .. Happy New Year to you and all those dear to you!
E.

[shallimarRose]

thank you... Happy new year to you also...

[Keith]

So few words say so much. An opportunity lost through a lack of communication maybe?

[shallimarRose]

Ha.. I actually cannot remember what this was about.. If I read it from someone else I might think he left and then wanted back in.. but she never locked him out? Thank you for commenting Sweet Keith...

[mags]

Very well put I think and I love the images you create. Margaret

[shallimarRose]

Thanks mags.. I appreciate.. Rose

[MsJewel]

I love the imagery - you still sit in the garden of dreams...throwing coins in the pool of probable cause. Some decisions aren't always the right ones...

beautiful poetry my friend.
:) Julie

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Julie.. xo Rose

[David Scott]

Very nice BJ!
Simplicity opening the door to the complexity of faltering or failed romance...
Some of this felt cliché at times, but I think it works well. You are describing a life situation that is all too common.
"Plausible..." indeed!

[shallimarRose]

Yes it was meant to feel cliche' David.. Thank you for reading.. xo Rose

[David Scott]

I thought as much. Well done. It was not a negative observation at all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

beautiful piece...especially love the imagery in the middle..."the pool of probably cause"

wow. "it's your boots on the wrong side of the door"---nice

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jacob. I am glad you could feel the strength in those last lines... xo Rose

[ron]

This is a very good poem about making the wrong decision about leaving some one Rose.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks you for reading Ron. Rose

[ron]

You are most welcome Rose.

[bobc]

R...good little piece. Liked the 'Throwing coins in the pool of probable cause' line very much. Well done...bobc

[shallimarRose]

Thank you again bob.. xo Rose

[Richie]

Hmmm. Some people don't know if they will make the right decision or the wrong one. Will I go through the door and be on the right side of the door or stay where I am?

'All you had to do was open it' you say in this poem, and that seems like an invite to come in. What would've happened when the person steps in?

[shallimarRose]

Well the point of te poem was he shouldn't have left in the first place.. lol thanks for reading Richie.. It's just a poem.. xo

[Richie]

I may not comment on all your work, but I do love everything you write