When you want me Back

"I wait up every night,
Trying to say goodbye,
Can't bring myself around.

As I look up at the sky,
I start to realize
Some thing I have started to forget.

Loss may have brought us together,
But it doesn't have to rule our fate.

Goodbye is just for now.
Where I'm going no one knows.
When you need me, I'll be back.

Kiss me once goodbye,
then let me go.

You head your way.
I'll head mine.
Maybe we will meet along the way.

Start our lives over,
Get back in the game.

However, when you're feeling down
Your life gets lame.

All you have to do
Is call my name.
And I'll be back "

Reviews

[Emily]

You sent this to me to read and look over and I really like that I can see that you've started making some of the changes I've shown you in other poems :-) I am so glad to see it. Here we go:

"I wait up every night,
Trying to say goodbye,
Can't bring myself around.

As I look up at the sky,
I start to realize
Some thing I have started to forget.

Loss may have brought us together,
But it doesn't have to rule our fate.

Goodbye is just for now.
Where I'm going no one knows.
When you need me, I'll be back.

Kiss me once goodbye,
then let me go.

You head your way.
I'll head mine.
Maybe we will meet along the way.

Start our lives over,
Get back in the game.

However, when you're feeling down
Your life gets lame.

All you have to do
Is call my name.
And I'll be back "

This is very good. I really like the way this piece made me feel. I loved the lines:

"Loss may have brought us together,
But it doesnt have to rule our fate."

That is just a fantastically emotionally riddled couple of sentences. They really make you explore what loss there was and what fate had to give them that was more than what they had.

Very nice work!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Certainly great words of unconditional love... sometimes we must let someone go to know just how much they mean to us. Nicely done.