Stalker Diaries

A stalker's life can be poetic sometimes

I would see her every day.
From my balcony, it was a splendid view to hers.
She would be reading, sleeping and sometimes dancing to a tune.
I would see her play her life every day from Jan to June.

One day she waved at me,
like a lightning shot up my arms, I waved back.
She smiled and then pointed downstairs.

“You want me to come downstairs?” I replied in sign language.

Smart girl she is, she understood and nodded. She disappeared to her room.

I wore my best black shirt and Levi’s jeans.
I should be the prettiest first date she has ever seen.

I came down my flat and saw a small group of dudes waiting for me.
I saw the girl at their side waiting for me.

They gave me two black eyes and a twisted arm.
I promised them I would be of no more harm.

From that day onward, I made my mind fit.
I would turn around my chair, away from the balcony, and only then would I sit. 

Author's Note

P.S. Though it is written in first person. I am not that stalker :P hehe.
This was a humorous piece that I once wrote while high.
I thought of mixing the lives of a poet and a stalker.
A light read. Have fun. And please comment :P

Reviews

[Max Meunier]

i enjoyed the humorous twist on a somewhat dark subject matter. i like how you structured the sort of semi-conversational tone by interspersing it with the would-be poetic inclinations of the "stalker's" perspective. a sort of fun and lighthearted look at what appears to be somewhat of a "stalking" happenstance.

[follywood]

This is really funny. It reminded me of the happy together stalker Acapella cover

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank your for the 'Roar'ing review

[follywood]

You know, you're quite "p"unny. ;) ;)

[Ashwin Shanker]

I am known to be 'pun'dit.

[Neal S]

This is different and refreshing. I enjoyed the twist at the end as well. Cool take on not letting your eyes wonder to much. I like it!

[Ashwin Shanker]

hahaha.... Thank you neal for the review. Glad that you enjoyed it.

[Abibliophobe]

Very comical and original! The rhyming workers really well as does the twist at the end! A great piece

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for the review. Glad that you loved it.

[Addict With a Pen]

I really like this! Very funny and creative. Your rhyming is flawless and your tone is quite amusing.
Great work!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you Mr. Poet. (I would like to address you by the surname :P )

Thank you for finding that my rhyming is flawless. Working on it to keep improving.

[The Girl on Fire]

T'was funny and admirable indeed!
Specially loved the way the poem suddenly changed its route and came to a twist, and the way her friends gave him(to be precise, you! :P ) two black eyes and a twisted arm to reminisce about! Lovely indeed.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Haha, often a writer must be careful not to be too imaginative that a reader feels that he is speaking out of his own experience. :P ... I will keep this in mind Yashita

[The Girl on Fire]

Yup you must :P
But be careful not to be extremely less imaginative too!

[Emlo]

I liked this, especially the twist, unexpected and amusing. :)

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you Emlo

[Willard Wells]

Nicely short story with a twist at the end. Well done.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Truly appreciate your review Mr. Willard

[T. Edana Talbott]

I liked this haha. Even if it was a tad bit creepy lol.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you Edana

[JetMardium]

i rather enjoyed it, and if you would be interested in collaborating, i think we could make a nice sequel where your more impulsive friend slaughters them and your character gets his chance, just a thought, always thinking

[Ashwin Shanker]

Well, your 'thought' was just recently released here as a movie :P ... HAha. Though the idea is taken, we can still have a go at it.

[JetMardium]

well they say there is only a finite number of stories out there to draw a template from, but i enjoy the macabre, and hues of violence. You should read my Through the Eyes of a Psychopath book. Its in the early stages and it was written in a drug and alcohol induced level of higher understanding.

[Ashwin Shanker]

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