Robotic

I used to love this poem. Now I think it's kind of stupid and cheesy and doesn't flow well enough. I'm putting it up anyways, though, for critiquing and all that. Comment with any suggestions or critique! Written on: Sept. 26, 2007

Farther from home than you'd ever imagine
Never see my life again
Locks of hair, I'm
Never there
Mechanically inclined
To just ignore
Winter sets in
Just falls from my head
Never again
I'll feel alive and
Pretend
I'm not here

(I'm not the w***e)
You want
(Me)