Silent Sight

I don't really know, to this day, what truely made me write this. I have a few ideas, but none of them are...normal, I guess. One idea, though, is that I was influenced by one of the greatest movies of all time: The Phantom of the Opera (2004 edition). Go

Silent sight, I feel you there
You touch my arm, stroke my hair
Watching me, an unseen voice
Do you give me any choice?
Surrendering to your seduction, sweet
Surrendering to you, I take defeat
Show your face, I've given in
Silent sight, I let you win

Reviews

[NightsShade]

Short and sweet, well it wasn't exactly 'sweet' but I think that you get the point. I usually don't like rhymming poems, but this one I have to say was fantastic.
I liked how short it was, nice and simple. The poem had a nice rythm to it, all and all i thought it was a nice piece.
Oh and there was one spelling error...........the second 'surrendering'.

Peace,
NightsShade